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Byrd

Eyes of the deepest ocean,
A whirlpool of intelligence to be seen.

Drawing you closer.

 

Protector of all that is,

Guarding the secrets of the world from evil.

To always be there.

 

Hatched from a pure silver egg,

The Byrd unfurls its majestic golden wings.

And flies to the night.

Author notes

I don't normally write fantasy poems, but I thought I'd give it a shot, you know...

A contest entry

Not my usual style...but what do you think?

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  • Wilted Rose Bush
    March 29, 2008

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    Wow - i agree with Gypsie Ink - you are very good at writing Fantasy poem. Love the stucture - well done - shame you didnt win the contest


  • Gypsie Ink
    March 18, 2008

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    Wonderful

    You write fantasy well. Keep at it. I would love to read more. For which option does this go with? Thank you for your entry and Best of luck in the contest.