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Willow Tree

Today I found the willow tree                    That sad excuse for a plant.
Yes, you've cut it down I see?                    Here we go, another rant
You know we used to love it so                      But that was then, and this is now
But now the little tree can't grow!                    It wouldn't have grown anyhow

That tree was supposed to mean...                  ...That we would always keep in touch
When the future was unseen                    We'd have memoirs, at least that much
But now you've gone and cut it down!                    Well what do you want me to say?
Maybe I should leave this town                    The tree didn't work anyway.

Well, what do you mean by that?                    This is our first call this year
...                                    Now you see what I mean here.
You know how busy I've been.                    This was the thing we dreaded most...
...That a huge gap would begin                    And that is what I've diagnosed


It'll just decay, that little tree                  I think it's served its purpose now
We need it more now, don't you see?                    It doesn't matter anyhow
...I think that I love you                    Oh spare me please, that isn't true
Yes it is! Don't drop the phone                    Too late. You left me all alone

Wait!              I did.
Five minutes more!              Or five more years?
Goodbye.

Author notes

Okay, so it didn't really fit the contest. And it didn't come out as well as I hoped it would. Anyway,

The way this is supposed to be read is from the first line of the first column to the first line of the second column, like a conversation. (The first column being the first person, the second column the second person.)


I stole the idea from recklesspoo ^-^ Hope you like!


I'll fix the spacing later.

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  • celestial
    March 23, 2008
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    This was so creative. I like the idea. Thanks for sharing.


  • liduen silver member
    March 16, 2008

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    At first I thought this was a self converstation - like Gollum. Either way its a very good poem. Probably not your best but amazing all the same.