Just like a prisoner
With a life sentence
Signed for eternal
Life in a cage
Which is made
To keep all the
Evil that he
Brought with him..
One who surrenders
To his fate, with
A hope to live..
Even in a cell
So am I captive
And I have given up
My disbelief, my
Sarcastic opinion
Of emotions
All these
Are locked up, in the
Dark, fading
Part of my heart
Which we all have
But which fades in some..
And I surrendered
Just to your words
Simple words,
That you have
Handcuffed me with
Suddenly,
Words said too early, yet
Impossibly right on time
Words that, with
All my sarcasm
All my skepticism
All my distrust
That I believed in most
Words of your
Eternal love
That became mine
Our.
I am glad to be
The fallen captive
Of our love
Eternally
Author notes
With inspiration from a contest, written for the guy i love. in the poem i meant the good way to be captive. to be captured by great, true love.
A contest entry
- ---x QUICKIE [you've got titles] by animated lies.
300 points, ended March 18, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Honestly?
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that is simply amazing, it really has a great amount of literature and depth
I wouldnt be surprised if you publish your poetry =]
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I read this, read your comment , then reread it several more times. Its interesting how your depiction of being in love is sort of like the sentence a convict would serve. I my experience you've hit the nail bang on the head...(my first marriage anyhow). life is always requiring us to give something up to keep what we want. very well written... rudolf
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I simply loved the simplicity of these words ...
and the beautiful truth ... True love goes on forever and ever. No hardship or wounds or external factors can destroy the love you have for that ONE you know you are part of forever.
Thank you for reading my work. It is a pleasure to read yours.
Love
Myra
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I usually cant stand really short lines, but you made it work really well. Bravo. One of my favorite things is discovering poems written in styles I usually dont like.
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Superb
i adore this poem....it was....well perfect ...i loved it in its simple purity
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A fantastic poem by you. You have a great way with words and I have fallen captive by them. I am happy that you have your love.
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This is a nice poem. It is well written. It is also sentimental and uplifting. I am glad you have someone like that in your life.
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This was a nice, more light hearted way to take the prompt. You had a mistake on the word "handcuffed," you forgot a D. Thank you for entering my contest.
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whoops, thanks.
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This poem is so cute! Well done!
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very well written and moving piece.. I loved the title.. and truly said how just few words make you captive for life.. starting is very good so is the ending.. superbly structured.. Wish you luck in your future aspirations..
Thanx for sharing..
Neha
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