Chiming notes
struck the air
and my eyes glossed over
I saw eternity
through the seams in our lives
Where the senses
meet perception
I swallowed back
My story book tales
making way for the
cascading light
Nothing was as clear
as the passion in your voice
as I called your name
and you called me her's
We're past contraceptives
and bullshit
Your smiles were like wishes
wishes of wasted desires
The rag was wrung dry
and I thirsted for sustance
I thirsted for remorse
Suprisingly, I've loved you less
Suprisingly, you've cared more
A contest entry
- Remind Him, Remind Me of what love used to be.... by Melissa Burns.
400 points, ended March 23, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - just about anything :) by nobodys-girl.
300 points, ended April 10, 2008, 56 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
This is totally fictional. He loves me
Comments
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Love it, especially the first stanza.
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it seems im the only one who starts to care more just when the other person starts to care less. oh well no one said it would be fair. thankyou so much for entering my contest and good luck!
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huh that's an interesting poem. Some good lines through out - ecspecially the last two lines. I get that. Thanks for entering
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damn babe
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