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Nine Months

Missing image

 

 

 

Perfect solitude eludes us all ever since

we emerged from the womb

into tribulation,

 

once, we were safely wrapped in a

warm, fleshly solace

oblivious to all

 

save the rhythmic beating of maternal

reality that absolutely

comforted with

 

tailored love, divinely designed and

soundproof to all but

her spirit’s lullaby.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • delightfulmess silver member
    March 25, 2008

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    What a unique take to this prmopt.
    Sensational. Best of luck in the contest.


    Delila


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    March 25, 2008

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    Beautiful bliss in this solitude.
    "divinely designed and soundproof to all but her spirit's lullaby" is a perfect ending. It sings of ethereal understanding and knowledge.

    A pleasure to have an entry of this caliber in my contest. Well done poet. This is beautifully soft and completely perfect. ~Pamela


  • Great Cthulhu
    March 20, 2008

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    Phenomenal!

    This is an amazing image of being wrapped lovingly in the womb. My favorite lines are the last two, beautiful! Well done, I enjoyed your wording choices, nice vocabulary. Good luck in the contest with this one!

  • now
    March 18, 2008

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    how fitting that i stumble upon this poem today. i just heard the news that my sister is going to have a baby, now i find myself consumed in thoughts of baby in a reflective manner. wonderfully penned write, beautiful and warm. complete peace can still be found within a mother's love. take care, now


  • fortyninereasons gold member
    March 17, 2008

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    Simply beautiful. My favorite part is... soundproof to all but her spirit's lullaby... this evokes memories of my 3 children. Wanting to keep them safe. Enjoying 'my' nuturing time with them alone. Good luck. J


  • Wild Mustang
    March 17, 2008

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    Last word in the first stanza, first line, shouldn't it be "since" not "sense"?

    This piece is deep, sophisticated, intricate... gorgeous. Great job, Michael. Another thread in the tapestry of art .


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    March 17, 2008

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    Beautifully expressed thoughts which convey a feeling of peace and wonder. There is little that can compare to resting your hand on a rounded belly and feeling the life beating within. My best wishes to you in the contest.



  • tara wilson gold member
    March 16, 2008
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    luv this...


  • CountryCousin
    March 16, 2008

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    Beautiful.

    More and more I am glad to always click on your poetry. You do such a splendid job. i like your style and the words befitted the graphic. Good luck in the contest.

  • ashjoe76
    March 16, 2008

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    :)

    soundproof to all but

    her spirit’s lullaby

    this could be any great poet's envy! wonder how you come up with such perfect themes and unique expressions...congrats and best regards!


  • Nature Song silver member
    March 16, 2008

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    The image of a newborn captured in the womb...a baby on the way. All a mother's hope and dreams of nurturing her young one on the way. Wrapped in her spirits lullaby...only a song each new mother know's all to well. ~Sie


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    March 16, 2008

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    this is beautifully written and it sounds like a write that mant a relate to.I love the depth in this well done daddy


  • Nicolette gold member
    March 16, 2008

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    As a mother of 3 children I can so relate to this and the sense of solitude that we experience in the womb made me smile too... thinking of how impatient I was to "meet" the little one!! Wonderful take on the prompt - definately a unique interpretation... now you have me thinking...

    ~ Nicolette


  • Blue Rew silver member
    March 16, 2008

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    Beautiful take on the prompt. In today's world,
    it seems incubation may be one of the few true
    solitudes left to us. This surrounds with
    tranquil atmosphere reminding us of deeper bonds.
    Blue


    PS-sense should be since...


  • Haunted-Memory silver member
    March 16, 2008

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    This is Excellent and how true. from the safety and comfort of a mothers womb to the noise hassle and tussle of life and having to grow among all the strife of this world. well portrayed (Brian)

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