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Change

Change in your pocket; that was me
Having to save your change
Anyone there could plainly see
Nothing was really strange.
Getting ahead, saving your pence
Earn your way and pocket your cents
Getting ahead
Getting ahead
Saving your money, just made sense

One day I became a dollar
I was the mighty buck
Somehow I seemed to get smaller
Something had gone amuck
I lost my place, things can’t get worse
Devalued, I know it’s a curse
I lost my place
I lost my place
My prominent place in your purse

Credit cards have taken my place
I have been cast aside
Plastic money saves time and space
It seems that I have died
I now cause grief, they changed my life
A dollar can only buy strife
I now cause grief
I now cause grief
Just try to give me to your wife

 

 

 

Author notes

Trijan Refrain
The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines. Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas, although a variation of the form is not to repeat the same line at the beginning of each stanza. In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different. The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8. The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:

Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 words of line five /c

Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4, 4 refrain/8
source: shadowpoetry.com

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  • LadyLavender gold member
    March 23, 2008
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    brilliant AMera, brilliant.


  • Faeryn
    March 16, 2008
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    I don't have a credit card so cash and change are my friend. This made me smile; I love it.
    Tay


  • PerVirtuous
    March 16, 2008

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    Quite funny and a wonderful social commentary. You have nailed this one. Somehow people don't seem to notice inflation as much when they don't actually see the money being exchanged. I see a winner here.


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    March 16, 2008

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    Well done here hon. This was a remarkable piece. Thanks for making me I needed it.
    I love you

    Mistress Passions


  • StarEyes
    March 16, 2008

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    Thanks for the smile tonight!! This is great, and how true your words! You never cease to amaze me with your words, and ideas!! Great job on this one!!

    Best of luck in this contest my dear sister!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • JohnnyD gold member
    March 16, 2008

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    This brought a smile to my face cubbie, very nicely done. And yeah, I rarely have any cash on me, rarely.

    And being old enough to remember when one really 'did' need to carry cash around, this write is familiar to me.



    Dad


  • capricornpoet
    March 16, 2008

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    whimsical wind

    a pied piper weave of the money chase and its
    fall from grace of what we thought was solid as a rock.
    lovely satirical whimsy with a chime like a money
    rhyme.Enjoyed this geniality of yours.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    March 16, 2008

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    I don't suppose you could lend me £5 until Thursday, could you? Ok so you have now bent the Trij to your will, where next, sis?

    I wasn't invited to this contest, so I can pin my hopes on you. Go for gold!

    M


  • And Hyetal
    March 16, 2008

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    I like this! I like the theme of change talking. I like the rhyme, too.

    Good luck in the contest!

    ~Cassie

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