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The Rebuttal

The Rebuttal...(I THINK not) however...

A rebuttal is only necessary if what they say is itching,(on the contrary)...
I've thought up some ways to dismiss these punny 'glitches',(scary!)...
Small attempts to attack leads to imformatable back slaps, next(ditches)...
I guess 'they' figure they can boggle me with these so-called 'wisewordz',

i'm laughing(i'm in stitches)


Freedom from my pen can only lead to destruction,

THINKER pissed, nah, (but watch the erruption)
Conceptualize your demise with blinks of 2 eyes,("it's a sensual seduction")


Embeded with bedbug diseases, infested these lack luster fleas,

now they all screaming,("please, save me!")
I allow you to pay me fees
These vines are crossed with incest trees, the THINKER's mind across intended pleads
The 'BOSS', (yeah right), Darky better bob and weave
I'll have Are-Sun 'Ride' you 'SON' until you burn up from disbelief
Then continue to through magnificent 'thoughts' at his 'Sun' spots 'til his nose bleeds
And if my son likes it hot, then 'Terrain' can feel my crafty breed
I'm top speed, the cops heed, you comics book characters are soaked with the THINKER's sneeze


Regrets, of course, the 'dim pale rider's' not done yet, of courses i haven't found any set
Universal death blows to the stirnum with thrust that leaves wholes in chest
If this were chess...(it's not)...

 

I'd check your mate,

(i'm nice with mine, better check your mate)

 Uhh, LEDGEND, it seems your tired retorts are a bit too late


'CanIThink' for a moment, (try not to hurt yourself) my THOUGHTS can snatch your wealth
Detach your spleen from that poetic flow you were delt,

Leaving you with deaf tones...(who can hear you?)...no one else
The THINKER is a force to be reckoned with
I was born an abortion and left as a kid

I swarmed the oceans and slept with squids, deformed notions (AsIThink, did)

Configured toxic potions and drank that 'shid'

You pawns in this game get flanked real quick

 

I'm eating hearty meals, pull out your liver, you figure, 'that's not part of the deal'

THINKER starts the drill:

AsIThink, Terrain, Swan, LEGEND, moluv, Dark Sun Rider, Wisewithwordz, AreSun, Swine, layne

Pardon these kills, i've fathered their skills,

Damn, now i'm at shame with myself for starting this ordeal

I would flame myself, but then who would there be to part-take in this poetic goodwill?

 

...(A moment of clearity)...can ya'll hear me?...


Distortions vexed the ribs, needed 'food  from thought' to stick to the exit's mid
Sections of my THINKing weapons possesses and pressed these pigs,

Now they all want to follow the 'thoughts' of a reckless rig
Truck loads of funk spilling over your computer gigs
If you idiots still seaking lessons, the teacher is willing to THINK up something BIG


...Just think of something B-I-G...


The THINKER releases atomic pressure, the vomit is measured,

Coming through like that bombing weather

The THINKER that bubonic treasure

These lames wanted to keep me plutonic, never

Rugged Terrain, (ha...lol) through this fruit off the train, watch him splash down like rain

Crashing down his 'faults' all the same, not Saint Andreas, New Yorkers fight through pain

Playing on asphalt in pushcarts as if they were submarians


The crowd loves me...(listen to the cheers)...it's that Oboma ledger
Like Keith, i'm drugging you chumps up,

'WordZ' has giving me life to dance all over you like "Crump"


Look at the stance i form, you clowns don't have a chance in this storm,
This rain gushes down like pain in your left arm
Understand how i attack the heart of my first born
Depart fiction from the norm, partying with Nixon...(2 fingers up)...then i'm gone
The ghost riding out before dawn!

Author notes

Read the notes...lol...these categories may be a bit 'gory'...lol...they fit the discription for some of these characters the THINKER is after! Enjoy!

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  • This is a very intriguing and very creative piece. Awesome imagery, loved the upbeat and crazy flow throughout.

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    November 10, 2008

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    In all honesty I am uncertain I understood this in its entirety...that's not a criticism just observation...but I loved the beat...I agree why retaliate if it only generates hate...uh oh excuse me the blackeyed peas said that too...but sometimes it makes sense as a line of defence to say shoo instead of boo hoo...the phraseology of " I was born an abortion and grew to be a kid" was so graphic a portrayal of being wasted without nourishment or nuture but yet somehow still managing to survive and thrive...I admire that...it's not about anything except not wearing a bad attitude dude...Amen to that.


  • Ms Sexy silver member
    April 1, 2008
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    enjoyed it alot your rymes are fierce. keep writing


    • WiseWithWordz
      July 1, 2008
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      i thank you truly...i' sooooo sorry i thanked you so late. please come again! i enjoy bringing joy to the readers eye's and mind!

  • dillpickle62
    March 30, 2008

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    Haha...

    This was great! Had me transfixed all the way through as i have and am getting to know the character's in this poem. hahaha...you guys all give me a great chuckle.


  • Itahed
    March 22, 2008
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    The Battle... Oh My!!

    Let's get ready to Rummmmmmmmmmmmmble!!!
    you guys are unbelieveable!!


    • WiseWithWordz
      March 22, 2008
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      thanks for your wonderful coments all the time...it's needed and well received....lol...always appreciate your thoughts.


  • moluv10
    March 20, 2008

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    i hope you know you have upset the Dark Sun Rider!lol This is a war!lol my stable has to regroup due to the severe beating we have received!lol we'll be back though!


    • WiseWithWordz
      March 22, 2008
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      lol...yeah...i told the THINKER of how he upset the dark sun rider...lol...i'm not sure if he mind...lol...thanks for keeping the battle ongouing...i find it quite fascinating and fun...your fire is needed. thanks for your incredible feedback all the time.


  • AsIThink gold member
    March 17, 2008
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    Here's the other response (lol): http://allpoetry.com/poem/4029817


  • AsIThink gold member
    March 17, 2008

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    This flow is soooooo crazy! I love it; this piece is blazing. You turned it up several notches...(so you THINK...lol). Love this 'rebuttal'...this is 1 of 2 responses (lol): http://allpoetry.com/poem/4029839


    • WiseWithWordz
      March 22, 2008
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      your words are always warrented. "i use your words to fuse the eruption underneath my crust...explosion are do to erode your vest, gravity takes on a new form hold of your chest, insanity breaks bold through you and your vets, oxygen erodes your brainwaves, reload the tech..."(AreSun) 'Heed the Warning'

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