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Christopher.

For all the years I have been,
it wasn't until now,
I know what it is to be alive.
I have seen most of nature's splendor throughout the world.
Experienced many different walks of life.
Witness to the birth of a child
and death's random choosing.
Miraculum and tragedie
nothing more than mile stones I've passed by.
It wasn't until I met you,
I know now what it is to be alive.
The first time I looked into your eyes,
I understood the phrase,
"Windows to the soul".
When you touched my face,
I felt the sudden beat of my heart.
Our first kiss,
I learned how to breathe.
In your embrace,
I relised what it is to be safe.
Your knowledge and beliefs taught me wisdom.
You penetrated the deepest recesses of who I am.
You dear love.
Yes you.
Because of you and your love for me
I now know what it is to be alive.

Audrey Evans
3/11/2008

Author notes

A moment in time I thank God he is no longer in my life, yet it is still a good write. Too bad he turned into such a loser...

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Comments

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  • xDemonicxAngelx
    November 17, 2008

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    This was lovely to read, and I'm glad that you have found happiness. You did a good job with this and you expressed your feelings clearly. Beautifully written. Thank you for entering and good luck.

    Take care


  • Frodofan silver member
    July 30, 2008
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    Not bad. I like the sentiment. Congrats to you.

    Thanks for entering.


    • AudreyEvans
      August 2, 2008
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      Thank you for your comment and support.

      Audrey Palmer
      aka rubyvaroom


  • SingPraiz4Hym
    July 28, 2008

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    I liked the emotional and love that you showed through your writing for your special man. We all love as we grow up but that first 'deep, spiritual and emotional' love really rocks us. Good luck in the contest.

    • AudreyEvans
      August 2, 2008
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      Thank you I'm glad my poem touched you. I can tell that you actually read "Christopher." by your comment. It's nice to get contest comments with substance not just the run of the mill rubber stamp, good luck, thanks for entering, reply.

      Audrey Palmer
      aka rubyvaroom


  • RawrSmileBabyPlz
    June 28, 2008
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    Wow

    Very well written and i like it alot. my favorite part is when you said "For all the years I have been,
    it wasn't until now,
    I know what it is to be alive.
    I have seen most of nature's splendor throughout the world" that was worded so well. thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
    ..<3..
    Shelly

    • AudreyEvans
      July 26, 2008
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      Thank you so much for your support. I am happy to know that my poems are being so well received by my fellow writers/poets. I'm looking forward to another contest of yours in the future. Oh and please feel free to parouse through my work anytime. I look forward to hearing what you have to say.

      Audrey Palmer
      aka rubyvaroom


  • DawnKestrel
    June 3, 2008

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    wow!
    Good luck in my contest!


  • only1love4ever
    June 2, 2008

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    Only1love4ever-Reply

    Ahh this is lovely and I was wondering if that was what it was about. That is goregoues and hopefully you have shared this with him. I believe he would truly adore this. It is heartfelt and heartwarming and a treasure to have as a piece of my contest.

    I would just like to say thank you from the bottom of my heart.
    This is an amazing write and it is most enjoyable and full of love and character.

    You have a great day.
    Congratulations, may many years be filled with love, joy and poems.
    Good luck.
    ~Only1love4ever


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    June 1, 2008

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    Beautiful work and so heartfelt
    are your words. Thanks a lot for
    taking the time to enter this contest
    and good luck to you with it here!
    I appreciate it!




    Jeremy0826


  • newnoakua
    May 27, 2008

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    hmm... not sure which option this is. Please put the number in your notes... It was a rule! I'm not quite sure about this piece. It wasn't quite what I was looking for. sorry...


  • Pandorea
    May 22, 2008

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    this is a very sweet piece. but you haven't put the option in your notes, so i don't see how it fits the contest so i'm removing this. having said that though, i did like it, don't get me wrong.


  • JessTheRentyMess
    May 20, 2008
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    this is very sweet. sounds like you met your "one" thank you for entering.

    ~Jess~


  • creationsfromheart
    May 13, 2008

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    OK I agree with the judge of the contest and if she was looking for a certin gender then she was right to not accept this as a poem of mising someone. You could break this into some stanzas as well. It is a fairly good write, however not a golden one for that contest.
    Now you have this listed in two I decided to compare it in the one sence you did not state which one you felt was judged unfairly... And also you did not follow my rules here as it states if in more then one contest it will not be read or concidered there for to be a fair judge you do not qualify for a win.


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    May 3, 2008
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    Thanks for entering.


  • MalevolentDesire
    May 3, 2008
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    This isn't really a poem of missing someone, more of an expression of gratitude for the love you have found.

    However, I think this is an incredibly deep dedication, and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. When you find that one person who makes you happier than anyone else does, it's the greatest feeling in the world.

    Thank you for entering.


  • xPink-Lotusx
    May 2, 2008

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    This is a really beautiful piece. I like the flow and the usage of words.. This piece speaks volumes..

    'I have seen most of nature's splendor throughout the world.
    Experienced many different walks of life.
    Witness to the birth of a child and death's random choosing.'

    I love these lines. I like how they stick out, really gets one thinking. Especially when you know how hard it is to find that someone, and then when you do and that person is so right, so wonderful that it makes every other experience in your life (good or bad) kind of fade into the background, bringing all the feelings of happiness and love the foreground.. Well written!

    • AudreyEvans
      May 2, 2008
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      Re: Christopher

      Thank you.
      I don't know what more I can say, except that I'm humble at the feet of your comments.

      Audrey Evans


  • stylization
    May 1, 2008

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    wow i cannnot believe that i have the first comment on this! it's a beautiful poem and a wonderful flow! i love that quote "eyes are the windows to the soul"

    one thing, though, in the author notes- it's knowledge, not knowlege.

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