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The question

Can anyone
resurrect love
that died in the abyss
of betrayal?

For that love
would cloister itself
in the quiet halls
where hurt does not exist.

A contest entry

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  • nilav
    April 29
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    i felt those few lines very powerful...

  • Saffron gold member
    March 30

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    I have read this and re-read this, and I cannot tell you how much this resonates inside me. I love the brevity of it, and your careful word choice—I adored how you described that love would cloister itself where it could not get hurt.

    Thank you so very much for composing this wonderful piece for this contest, and for sharing your talent with me.


    Saffron

  • Lugh
    March 16
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    excellant choice of words. cloister itself? what a perfect choice.

    Thanks for this.

  • Rowan gold member
    March 16
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    Simply beautiful.
    I really liked this.
    Deeply echoes.


  • B Chandler silver member
    March 16

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    Commentary

    At first, I was somewhat confused about the meaning but then soon found myself re-reading it again and still the metaphorical taste was left in my mouth. Keep penning Di and good luck


  • capricornpoet silver member
    March 16
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    hurt

    is it hurt or the abyss of betrayal, love that elusive grail..


  • Wandika gold member
    March 16
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    Unsure

    for if truely love then resurrection is always a possibility.

    Jim

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