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She sits there,
Not able to hold her own,
As her emotions share,
What words could not do alone.

She sits here,
Wondering what to say,
As the end nears,
She feels herself slipping away.

She sits silently,
Knowing you won't listen,
As she quietly,
Begs for recognition.

She sits in the darkness,
Hiding from their eyes,
As her sadness,
Could be heard in whispered cries.

She sits in her best,
Knowing she can't win,
As the real test,
Is about to begin.

Author notes

So, I wrote this after my Math A Regents. I was bored and had time to spare. Funny thing is, I was really happy when I wrote this, so it's kind of ironic that I was spouting out depressing poetry.

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  • lovemedeath
    April 19, 2008

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    that was powerful u could realy feel the depression in the poem..............i loved it!!!!!!


  • Twilight Moon
    March 17, 2008
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    really beautifull expressive poem. great job


  • XxTattered WingsxX
    March 17, 2008

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    It is a bit ironic that you wrote this when you were happy. Nonetheless, it is a beautiful poem. I look forward to reading more of your work..


  • joelegy
    March 16, 2008

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    very nice! I liked it alot!

    I really liked how sad and hopeless it feels. the words work so well together.. and I like how it rhymes without losing it's flow. I know that I suck at rhyming poems.. so I love reading them.

    She sits silently,
    Know you won't listen,
    As she quietly,
    Begs for recognition.

    ^^ i like that verse the best, and the last line with it! very nice! XD


  • SoniaDayana
    March 16, 2008
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    this is really good i like it


  • PassionateWriter09
    March 16, 2008

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    Wonderful

    This is a good poem. You ahev great talent. I love your writings...you can make anything happen, I guess. I love to sing and write to. Id appreciate it if you commented on my poems...Ill definatly comment on more of yours. Bye for now.


  • Deathwolf Tasagka
    March 16, 2008

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    This Is good really good again lassie i liked it alot its deep and emotional.

    Sincerely,
    Lonelywolf Tasagka


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    March 16, 2008

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    The best dark poetry is written when the poet is in control; that way she can let herself down into the place where the deepest hurt lies, but have a rope to haul herself out again. Poetry written from depression can be self-indulgent and peevish (been there, done that!). This one is pretty good.

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