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The Push and Pull Effect

Small habits commence
like the lighting of Cohibas.
Then putting the flames out
on my brittle skin.

Deriving the pain
then writing descriptive
might win me favor
And if not, I'm bored.

My front porch
cluttered with clothing
Attempts never made
to bring hope to the sick.

But I'm sick inside
enough for the pillbox
to empty quickly
Got to find paper.

A scrawl and a scratch
with ink and/or charcoal
These words form in length
No real reason for thoughts

If stuttering syllables
Then I'll scrape out my lines
With edges of lighters
Abundant on my desk

Just igniting emotions
From pain to self loathing
Pretending to encourage
Every good cause existing

Yet I seem to not fucking care
At least when wasted and fighting
with every simple remedy
offered to save me from waste

If in countries that require
A simple code of proper dress
I would succumb to the starching
Then talk under my breath against.

Wanting to be recognized as futile
But in artistic form
I happen to press flesh on windows
And give neighbors a good show

An appeasing sight to the public
But if witnessed, a faker
A dreamer in the making
If only I could dream without death

Still I compose my wrists
to break slightly in the bend
And begin to press keyboard
with the motions of cripple

Feel my threats, why don't you
Every key punched with decision
No threats sent my way
I will kidnap my inspiration

And we will crash together
Trunk full of body parts
Translated as these writings
Meant to cauterize your hearts.

Author notes


pretty much about the thought process to inspire me to write
a creative peice and the pretense that comes with it

In a list

A contest entry

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  • background music
    June 21, 2008

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    Very interesting... This is very thought provoking. I like to think that writing is my outlet not my facade... But when I read this and think about it... there is a lot of pretense in writing at times. Very good entry, thank you for entering.


  • Nam
    June 7, 2008

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    9th part seemed a bit off-pace to what's before, and after it. I liked how it delved into slight differences in vernacular yet still stayed strong in the overall vocabulary of the poem. Other than that, a nice poem that you have written here.

    -Nam


  • Livingemptyspaces
    June 2, 2008

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    I absolutely adored the last line there. Good luck in the contest and do please keep on writing! Your works are a real gem to read.


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    March 20, 2008

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    A very interesting

    take on this particular prompt.
    I love how you highlighted the tendency for poets to have certain eccentricities and tendencies towards bizarre behaviors.
    I love the metaphors and how they all lead into one another.
    Definitely one of the most interesting/intriguing poems I've come across... it was thoroughly enjoyable.
    Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest!!!!


  • Metaphorist
    March 19, 2008

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    A perfect interpretation of the contestholder's quote. This would be in the finalists if I had a say in the matter Well done indeed.


  • pappacass
    March 17, 2008

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    wow

    and i wrote a poem about not being able to write but it doesn't compare....awesome, thanks for the insight to your mind my man


  • j-ay rose
    March 17, 2008

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    i like the author notes best. maybe. it is all lovely. yay for lame comments. i like that you capture the distress of rapid of thought. it makes me smile.

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