heavy breathing
left me short of mind
and understanding
what is wrong with me?
i can't wake up
all i hear is screaming
dear friend don't hurt me
claw me with your words
explain to me insanely
wake up child
from your own dementia
pills can drive you wild
whisper sweet serenity
calm my bleeding wounds
save me from obscenity
Author notes
As soon as I read the prompt for the contest I immediately thought of the anime movie Akira and this scene... See the picture above. I know, its really weird.
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I'm not into anime, and the graphic kind of scares me. This is very intense.
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I never saw this movie
I loved the flow and the layout of your poem though. It was a really good write. Thank you for sharing with me and the group, you are a great poet.
Kelle Marie
stavykm
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I never saw the movie but I like the italic effect you used to make a separate voice project. Nicely done. :-)
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I saw this movie. I remember this scene too. Very strange and scary scene, watching all those toys come to life and come after the little boy. The music to this scene and the voices were ungodly, but fitting too. A real mind trip. This poem depicts what is going on quite well. I especially liked the lines:
"wake up child
from your own dementia
pills can drive you wild"
Ain't that the truth!
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this is a nice poem i like the whisper sweet serenity calm my bleeding wounds save me from obscenity thank you for sharing this with the group
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Not sure of the prompt, or what it was for the contest, but l did like the flow of these lines, the alliteration and the picture you chose to accompany it.
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The prompt was "Tear the bear," portray the evil side of a teddy bear.
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I never relate to anime for some reason. I guess because I'm not into it and the characters don't seem at all soft like a teddy bear does. I see where you went with this though and pretty good take on the idea. thank you for entering
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