in sunlight's bosom
embraced by woodland arms
-blue jays in silence
Author notes
haiku
In a list
A contest entry
- Short Japanese Forms Only - Contest by poetryality.
1750 points, ended April 15, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
How would YOU phrase the second line?
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Love it love it love it love it and also, I LOVE IT!
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This is a wonderful short piece. The color goes with it wonderfully.
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Great! The silence echoed!
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Firstly, I love birds and blue jays are surely my favorite wild birds. Your haiku in its traditional form is refreshing and spins a wonderful portrait of Spring and its' rebirth. Excellent! Thank you for this entry and I wish you the best in the challenge.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Whoa, silent blue jays!
Marlene -
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That's what made it ramarkable, they were strangely docile!
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a beautiful image. very serene & quiet; picturesque.
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I'm not very skilled with haiku but I think this one is perfect - great word choices to evoke the scene and mood.
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Thanks for your kind remarks, "RA".
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Can visualize this occurring. Scenic haiku you have penned for this contest. This is a 5,6,5 syllable poem you have written here.
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This is a nice thought. You give the reader a serene feeling, which is hard to do in such few words. You portray thoughts of trees cradling the blue jays while the sun sings them to sleep.
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