all the boys & girls on the corner
play it cool.
shiny sequin tops with bright! pink stiletto pumps
waiting for their man to show up.
sugar daddy whats-his-name
pullin' up inside his escalade
feelin' the scene
and checking it [twice]
lookin' for the girls that look as sharp
as the needles he sticks them with.
paralyzed pinhole pupils stare back
from the crowd
looking for a crazy wild mixed up
sort of night.
because all the boys & girls on the corner
play it cool.
with their tacky makeup and jewelry as
gaudy as las vegas lights
faces botox shot and cut up with knives
[baby, its so tight]
pin-up baby doll princess please,
cover up the tracks leading up
your arms.
it looks as trashy as the streets you came from
& your as pretty as the girls on the movie screens.
but sugar daddy death wish will feed your veins
just enough to keep you that way
as a heroin trashy dirty pretty barbie doll
it only took one [prick] & you lost it all.
because all the boys and girls on the corner
play it cool.
Author notes
grr... im still having trouble getting my groove back.
i havent written in so long.
this is the second write ive been able to finish in..
god knows how long.
sooooo i hope you like it.
A contest entry
- Needles and Pins by Danna Hobart.
300 points, ended March 23, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is great, the rhythm and flow fit the seen you are painting so well and the perhaps inadvertent play on words that pops in and out. I loved it. Keep it up.
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This is the first long(ish) poem that I didn't have to force myself to read all the way through. Great flow and imagery. Beautifully written.
Love it.
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I thought this flowed very well , and it has great imagery. Thank you for entering.
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hey its been awhile... im trying to get back into writing my self... nice work by the way...
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