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alyssa

A precious little girl who is
Like a butterfly who is full of joy
Young and beautiful inside and outside
Special to me and others so much
Sweet heart to me and others
A kind person, and loving and caring,

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Dedicated To: My daughter, Alyssa, ( 8 yrs. old)

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  • DarkbladDeathStrike
    September 19, 2008
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    ^_^

    How sweet, I wish you were my mom ..nice poem.


  • SweetRoses
    June 1, 2008

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    This is very beautiful. It reminds me of my sweet little niece whom I love very much. This is a great dedication.


  • rhondasail
    April 15, 2008

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    Again and again I am impressed with your simplicity of language. This write is strong in the positive outright 'statement' of the sweetness and specialness of your baby girl, Alyssa...Great write. Peace, Rhonda


  • gllarso
    April 3, 2008

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    Very beautiful, your daughter sounds like a very special person. I love the way you describe her as a butterfly, I picture her fluttering about all bubbly and cheerful and full of energy.

    If I may, I would like to make a few suggestions too:
    1. Line "L" should probably be "is full of joy"?
    2. Line "A" (Last line), might consider adding another word or two, it just doesn't quite seem finished... i.e. "A loving and caring friend/daughter/child"?


  • Three Doves
    March 22, 2008

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    Yes little girls are so precious and what I find most interesting is I have a granddaughter named Alyssa that just turned 9 on the 27th of February. Thank you for sharing. Peace in light and love.


  • Frogzter gold member
    March 17, 2008

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    What a loving tribute! A delight to read! It is obvious that she is your everything as well she should be... this she will treasure always!

    Blessings,

    Frogz~


  • Gentle Chaos Lion
    March 15, 2008

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    Loving and caring are the wings of joy, and a girl who is precious to her Mother and special to all others will fly. Beautiful to watch. Blessings.

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