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Waiting On A Blue Moon

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New moon, you came to me
in darkness you were cast
with doubts the sun would ever shine
upon a sorrowed past

Crescent moon, faith subdued
the shadows that remained
Your moonlit sky had shown to me
so much I had to gain

Quarter moon, hope is shown
between one's trust and mine
and ah the joys that we had known
with so much more to find

Gibbous moon, overjoyed
at all that was to come
for still a heart called out to me
between the earth and sun

Full moon, you spoke to me
as beauty in ellipse
for even then, the shadow cast,
already an eclipse

Waning moon overhead,
the darkness overtakes
When Crescent moon falls from the sky
this heart is sure to break.

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6-6-8-6 syllables. Why? I don't know.

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  • Janjan
    December 13, 2008
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    A+++

    Dear Yemassee: You have expressed yourself well here. Well written. Love, Janjan xoxo


  • Cynthia
    September 30, 2008
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    Excellent

    What a beautifully penned piece of poetry.
    You did a wonderful job with this.
    Congratulations on your most deserved trophy.
    Very well deserved.
    Well done.
    Keep up with the great work.
    Keep on penning.
    Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful talents with us.
    *S* Cynthia


  • moon2u
    September 4, 2008

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    ALSO GUILTY OF BEING A MOONCHILD

    So of course I love this poem
    I think you have covered all the stages of her glory
    I am fascinated by the moon
    I even have moon earings that have been reiki-charged
    lol


    • Yemassee gold member
      September 4, 2008
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      Thanks. Now I'm hungry for moon pies. I wonder if the grocery store is still open?


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    May 7, 2008

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    This site, indeed, is as mysterious as the moon,
    with this luminous selection magically appearing,
    shedding light on the masterfull talents
    of the poet, now rightly celebrated.
    The light and the darkness
    in perfect description.

    Bravo!

    Aesthete


  • bozoloper
    April 21, 2008

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    I like this piece a lot... the formatting of the stanzas with the phases of the moon works very well!
    Your rhyme structure moves the poem along.


  • Wolf Mistress silver member
    April 20, 2008

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    Wow...I was always obsessed by the moon...don't know how that comes...
    But now..when I overthink your words it might be a bit like this......

    I loved it...
    ah...forget the 6-6-8-6...I wouldn't even notice..it's all abacadabra to me

    XXJeannette

  • mythicdreamer
    April 18, 2008

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    Speaks sweetly and with hope of rising from the depressing darkness of our lives through the various phases, only to return to the darkness. Stark.


  • maa gold member
    April 18, 2008

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    congratulations on the golden cup for this poetic masterpiece ...
    seeing a lot of sensitivity peeking through the clouds that keep the moon captured out of fear it might fall ...
    I like that ...


  • Mari Goes gold member
    April 18, 2008
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    Just listening to the Once in a Blue Moon


  • MargaretG
    March 30, 2008
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    Congratulations, well deserved.


  • gaze
    March 24, 2008

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    Congrats to your first gold in the group!!!
    Beautiful poem, well deserved!!!


  • Hinemoa silver member
    March 24, 2008
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    You little beauty Yem

    On your GOLD trophy! CONGRATULATIONS!


  • angelica silver member
    March 24, 2008
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    Congratulations Yem on your GOLD win. Now you can't delete this one.


    • Yemassee gold member
      March 24, 2008
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      LOL, you're right, I made that promise and have pretty much lived up to it so far, I won't delete it. Thanks!


  • Maureen silver member
    March 24, 2008
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    CONGRATULATIONS, YEM!

    You deserved it! I'm already looking forward to the next contest. Make it a good one! (That wasn't an order but it did sound like one. Sorry about that!)

    <3 Maureen

    • Yemassee gold member
      March 24, 2008
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      Thanks. Now I can't complain anymore about never winning...how sad!

      Yes madam, I will make it a good one! Umm, any idea what that might be? I haven't the least idea for a contest.

      • Maureen silver member
        March 24, 2008

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        Ummm Lately I've been reading some odd stories in the news. How about writing a poem about something odd or peculiar? Just a thought (it was the first thing that popped in my mind). Isn't that odd? lol


        • Yemassee gold member
          March 24, 2008
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          That's an idea. I like odd stuff anyway. I had a couple other possibilities too but I forgot what they were.


  • waydownuponjoy
    March 21, 2008

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    As a moon child ...

    I found that each verse of your poem was well shared and I liked the form you chose. Nothing was forced and it flowed well. I am up early and the very full moon is lighting up the trees outside my window as if the sun is coming up. Coming from Maine do you ever go to watch the moon rise over the Atlantic? It is a very exhilarating experience for me to do so, what a view. Good luck in the contest! joy


  • klassy lassy
    March 18, 2008

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    May a blue moon be worth waiting for, Yem, the crescent moon always remain a "baby moon smiling sideways." (Leslie Ann Parrish) And may all your moons be smiling. ~ K


  • catz Moderators member
    March 18, 2008

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    Wow, Yem. This is gorgeous. It's one of the nicest of your poems I've read. The rhyme and rythme is exemtply. And the progression is very visual. I can see a trophy there, my friend. I hope you get it


    Dee

  • judmc
    March 18, 2008

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    GOOD WRITE

    Quite a nice symbolic poem ,well rhymed and flowing well imaginative with well chosen phrases. I enjoyed reading it. If you like poems with a happy ending may I reccomend my"Peter's Girl" "Blue Eyes" or even
    "Little Girl" Hope you like them George(JUDMC)U.K.
    Good Luck and best wishes.Keep Writing!

  • Maureen silver member
    March 18, 2008
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    Dear Yem,

    I watched the recent eclipse of the moon in all its splendor. At one point, the moon was gold. I love your poem speaking of the moon metaphorically. May it garner you your first gold trophy!



    <3 Maureen


  • hugh wyles silver member
    March 17, 2008

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    Dear Yem,

    For this belated observation
    I hope that I may be forgiven.
    I'm suffering acute stagnation
    although by conscience lately driven.

    Hey!! I like your poem VERY much! Although it may be constructed on a 6,6,8,6 syllabic formula, your choice and placing of words gives it a poetic flow and consistency between each stanza which is quite enviable, not to mention admirable.
    If this is what being "moonstruck" means, we should have a lot more of it!
    Best of luck in the voting Captain! Loud applause.
    Hugh (R.)


  • jenelda silver member
    March 17, 2008

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    Dear Yem,
    The moon is very beautiful, I love to sit outside at night and watch it. Have you ever seen the colours around the moon? I have here in Australia, yellow, blue, green, it's enchanting.
    Your poem is wonderfully written. I love it.
    Jen

  • MargaretG
    March 17, 2008

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    Moon phases are endlessly fascinating, how clever of you to make them a metaphor. Your rhymes and meter are lovely. Best of luck!

  • Hinemoa silver member
    March 16, 2008

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    Ahhhhh Yem this is an excellent poem. I knew you were a good Poet, this poem proves it. And don't you tell me any different because I won't listen. You have out done yourself this time, it's even better than Sir Ima's and that's saying a lot coz I love his poems.
    Great work Yem.
    Hine.

  • angelica silver member
    March 15, 2008

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    Simply beautiful

    Dear Yem,
    Wonderful, You have written a beautiful poem my friend on the different phases of the moon. So don't even THINK of removing it! You have shown that you are a very good poet. Thank you for entering our first monthly contest and a very good luck to you in the voting.
    Love Joan


  • aboomer silver member
    March 15, 2008

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    I really like how you have done this, with the phases of the moon connecting to life/love. Great wording, great images, reads nicely.
    Very well done!!
    Good luck in your contest.

  • Mari Goes gold member
    March 15, 2008

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    What a wonderful poem you have here!!!
    Such excellent ways to go with the moon, each fits perfectly to the mood (feelings) you show here.
    You've learned to like and be inspired by the moon, and I'm very happy with the result. Not only this but other 'moon' poems of yours, show your ability to see more than the moonbeams in the sky
    Really a great poem, for a non poet, your verses are more than fine

    Excellent work


  • Haunted-Memory silver member
    March 15, 2008

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    Fantastic

    This poem is fantastic and very clever how you have used the moon cicle in this poem to create a masterpiese. Brilliant read (HM)

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