She's the chemically imbalanced girl
with a hint of death in her eyes
[& you on her mind]
scrawling messages to strangers on the train seats.
But with her knees to her chest & her ink-stained heart
[beating oh-so silently in her chest]
she's a mere shadow of a girl.
[She's got a body like an hourglass,
it's ticking like a clock.]
She's whispering the stars right out of the sky
& into your head, tracing secrets through
the essence of your dreams.
[Bleeding for attention, but would you even notice?]
Her heart is safety pinned to her sleeve
just waiting to be torn away by another silly boy.
Choking on lyrics to a song she's never heard
[the stale oxygen makes her shake]
& her new favourite thing to pass the time before
she sees you again is to pick at the stitches;
[healing just ain't her thing.]
Author notes
"[She's got a body like an hourglass,
it's ticking like a clock.]" - 'Misery Business' by Paramore.
'Beauty in Pain'
Hope this is what you're looking for.
Option 3 - dirty pretty.
Madison Mary.
A contest entry
- My Hands Feel Like They're Rusting [A.w.a.y.] ♥ by SarahEatsAirplane.
900 points, ended April 30, 2008, 37 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Human Shapes Burned On Concrete Walls-x by Dead Star--x.
525 points, ended March 27, 2008, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ::>Dirty Pretty by Nicotine Eyes.
300 points, ended April 28, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything and everything!!!! by Falcon SilverWolf.
450 points, ended June 6, 2008, 74 entries
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Comments
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omg this is the fifth really sadx poem you people are trying to make me cry such emotion and ikmagery
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the first verse/stanza is very nice, as is this whole poem. very original and unique. good luck! -
i loveee the first verse.
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Love it!!! Well-written, kinda different too. The dirty pretty is enough to add something to the piece but not overdone. Loved the first stanza. Great word usage and images...
good luck in the contest!
~QoA
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gorgeous♥
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Wow i love the connection between the girl's heart and a clock. pretty creative I would say.
imagery in thsi is great, and I love just to overall feel of it.
its a tad cliche, but sometimes that's not a bad thing.
finalist.
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Great write and I love that song! I like this alot , its not something you see everyday ya know? keep it up =)
Zannah
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Thanks, and thank you for always commenting on my poems, I really appreciate it.
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