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More Than Just

You're more than just my lover,
You're my shoulder to cry on

You're more than just my bed mate
You're my confidant

You're more than just my boyfriend
You're my truest friend

Be honest and tell me what you think.

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  • Brooklynn Tainted gold member
    March 23, 2008

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    You're more than just my lover,
    You're my shoulder to cry on

    You're more than my just bed mate
    You're my confidant

    You're more than just my boyfriend
    You're my truest friend

    i couldnt choose one part because i love the whole thing. its so short but really good. love the bed mate/confidant part the best though


  • DrunkenRam
    March 23, 2008
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    This is a really nice embodiment of what Love Poetry is supposed to be, personal and reassuring, I like the write very much, it could be longer, but it is good.
    However, you might want to check the grammar a little, You transposed "Just my" with "My just" in both of the last two stanzas.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    March 15, 2008

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    yes this is the declaratrion of the loveful heart and there every thing is seen by the beauty of the heart and this beauty is knitted in the every word of this heartwarming work..well done