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Caramel

Sugar mixed with tears; inhaling screams of aching years,
Wind blew moving her hair; sorrow she took a dress to wear,
In harbor of time a moment she seeked; wrinkled her flesh & made her weak
Mirror mirror on the wall; give back my youth sell me back my soul

Sugar mixed with heat; knead the flesh to smooth the feet
Her beauty became a stamp; send away from her flesh making it cramp
Release me, the soul furiously yelled; as in cage of time tightly was held
The hair slowly turned gray; servant became to hear and obey

Sugar made to smooth the skin; caging the soul inside its bin
Sugar sweet, sugar sour; attract & charm such as the flower
Sugar and beauty mix to greet; skin, body & heart to bleed
Sugar, no its caramel; the road of heaven and sometimes hell.
 
12:20PM
15-3-2006

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Mirror Mirror on the wall...

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  • WoW! Isn't that true, all you ever hear people talk about is how they wish they were younger or more beautiful. Well done!
  • Erigeneia gold member
    May 7

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    Stunning Pen!!!

    sorrow she took a dress to wear

    Your words weave such a tale of longing, captivating from start to finish. Very accomplished writing..

    ~Erigeneia

  • WOW this was very unique... I absolutly love the
    magical chanting aspect to it.

    It sounded like a spell kinda.
    This is a beutiful poem of yearning for youth


    Delila


  • ennovy silver member
    March 15

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    Magnificent Piece of Art

    Ahh! you have penned the fate of life for some women and I see the story unfold, in sadness, pain and her being a prisoner of her own beauty. This is a brilliant write that touched me very deeply......novy