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van bloeisels en brood (of bread and blossoms)

 

 

 

groen is die sonlig

en baie voëls skyn

op my balkon breek ek brood

in stukkies, klein genoeg

vir ‘n kwikstertjie –

ek breek my winters

in hierdie brood, die lyf

van blaarlose dae

en my hande

vermenigvuldig die klank

van ‘n enkele bloeisel op ‘n tak

tot die lente-boorde

van jou stem wat swel

en rypword in my

en my winters vertaal

tot amandel, lemoen

en wildeperske

 

 

 ~x~

 

 

green is the sunlight
and many birds are shining
on my balcony I break bread
into pieces, small enough
for a wagtail -
I break my winters
in this bread, the body
of leafless days
and my hands multiply the sound
of a single blossom on a branch
to the spring orchards
of your voice that swells
and ripens in me
and translates my winters
to almond, orange
and wild peach

 





 

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  • charcoal
    September 9
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    stunning poetry.

    left me speechless.


  • campanaro silver member
    March 26

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    Nicolette,

    Sometimes words can escape in front of your soul,
    but the meaning and knowing is always there.
    This is another time when this is true.
    Lovely poem.
    Thank you for sharing this one.
    Best
    Love Peace
    campanaro


    • Nicolette gold member
      March 26
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      thank you, again, for reading my little poems and for your very generous support, campanaro


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    March 3

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    PUIK!

    Ek kan regtig die verlange in jou gedig voel en jou woorde val soos sagte reen op 'n warm sonnige dag. Hierdie gedig verkwik my beslus. Baie geluk met hierdie besondere gedig.

    Dankie vir jou inskrywing.

    ~Bekka~


  • Prince Charming
    February 26

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    Geweldig geschreven. Werkelijk perfecte keuze van woorden die je laten wegdromen in de late wintermijmeringen. Het is altijd net weer iets extra's om een gedicht in je eigen taal te lezen en als het dan ook zo geweldig geschreven is dan is mijn dag goed. Veel succes in de Contest.
    Herman


    • Nicolette gold member
      February 27
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      Baie dankie, Herman . So good to be able to understand both Dutch and Afrikaans!


  • Sandi Alford gold member
    February 19

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    Nature is the loveliest parallel to human nature - every color, smell, sound - emotion is found in her. This was truly a wonderful pen. I enjoyed both versies, Afrikaans is a colorful language and your alliteration and resonance sounds were delightful to read aloud, héél goed gedaan!

    de groetjes, Sandi


  • thepoetssoul
    February 10

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    Beautiful images brought forth from your dancing quill
    It vibrates with a nature tone, that lifts the spirit in song.
    I love the last lines they are beautiful.
    Be blessed in all you ever do.

    Tony


    • Nicolette gold member
      February 11
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      Thank you, Tony - you are most kind. This is one of my own personal favourites too


  • Swan song gold member
    August 3, 2008

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    Wow sigh!!!! You are jsut wonderful!!!! This was a little different in a sense than what your usually write It is beautiful none the less


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    July 20, 2008

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    A deeply pensive piece, that sings a soft natural song about the spell of love, and congrats on the silver.


    Love and peace always
    mj.


  • sassylilpoet silver member
    June 1, 2008

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    I must tell you I am not a fan of free verse~yet you are gradually changing my mind elegant penning


  • bird at rose
    May 6, 2008

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    What a rich heart you have

    Nature surrounds you for so many new thoughts always refreshing my smile without repeating the same idea in your last poem using one topic, love. I thought "green is the sunlight" creatively previews the poem because you think of growth which needs the shine in compliance. Becomes deeper than that, but it intrigued me how you related your piece to a treasure outdoors, and then at the end you emphasized what it means to you comparing for a dear friend. And, birds are a wonderful sign of sprouts etcetera for a gorgeous season... I cannot fathom you seeing a variety of them, but then carefully choosing one, the "wagtail" bonding the thought together working with a dog too!

    Feeding small bits to watch be eaten is a very kind thing to do and usually forms a grin, so that is so fitting even for both dog and bird. A way to forget all about winter when splitting it uses devotion too, great as always. Even literally, we like spending time on precious things like this over and over, and that's how love should be instead of being drained by another snow in a way.

    Ahhhhh, you pick the ripest speech of gesture between each other, and the vibration past a bud you see shows the impact of softening as well as the floating of a branch in a breeze... Your last three lines are really great because it flips excitement into two ideas for me. One is, at that number it starts being a few languages of treats coming out. And, like speaking of the other seasons, offering spring, summer and autumn so to speak before it goes back to winter again. At any month, you can make caring moments take over!

    Beautiful poetry, found it again with you, and congratulations on a well deserved silver,
    PIA-K

    • Nicolette gold member
      May 7, 2008

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      What a lovely comment, PIA-K - I can see you really put a lot of effort into your words - thank you so much! Actually the "wagtail" i refer to is a bird... even in the wild they are very tame...always wagging their "tails". Thanks again - I really appreciate your comment!

      • bird at rose
        May 7, 2008
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        I noticed that, but also the contemplation with a second thought you might get from reading "wagtail," feeding a dog or-- Poetically, I think it works great both ways when it reminds you of...!


  • Cat gold member
    March 28, 2008

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    as always this piece contains your soft touch and lovely phrasing- the images
    are really beautiful-
    i do feel like it is a bit thick with the words "the and my"- but that said..

    i think this is beautiful- and the message relevant

    thanks so much for joining in with all of us


    Mary


  • NurseChilly gold member
    March 25, 2008

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    this makes winter worth waiting for...

    sigh

    yes ..... oranges bloom and ripen on the chords of love

    G.x


  • just rob gold member
    March 24, 2008

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    What they said,

    and oddly, you are the only poet I can think of that regularly makes me SMELL moods.

    Odd, innit?



    • Nicolette gold member
      March 24, 2008
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      ... I'll just take the "odd" as a compliment, especially from someone as you, Rob!! Thank you!


  • layla.
    March 24, 2008
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    beautifullllllllllllest!


  • internal heights
    March 20, 2008

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    Absolutely stunning imagery and a truly heart-warming read. There is little as peaceful as sunshine, birds calling, and green grasses and you capture these ideas with interesting and unique phrasings. I also really like the flow from concrete ideas fading into the beautiful and peaceful abstract. I really enjoyed it.


  • Mallig gold member
    March 19, 2008

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    Beautiful! I loved "birds are shining on my balcony", a wonderful poem to herald the changing season.


  • klassy lassy
    March 19, 2008

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    The last lines of this poem are such a medley of ripenings, the essences of hope, understanding, and fruition. Another chanson d'amour, the bread and the wine. This crescendos, you know...

    Karen


  • Emerald13
    March 19, 2008

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    ooo you made it ! ... the poem is a wonderful metaphorical moving into the season through the sounds i get .. from beak to hand to voice ... poetry, always >>> Gina


  • ukelova
    March 17, 2008

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    Night Hope

    Hello there.

    I saw your link of NH's list so dropped by to read one of your poems.

    This one is excellent - truly an example of 'true poetry' as it concentrates on images and a fresh use of language.

    I was really impressed by this awesome extract:


    my hands multiply the sound
    of a single blossom on a branch
    to the spring orchards
    of your voice

    Have a wonderfully creative day,
    BJ.


  • barefoot contessa silver member
    March 17, 2008

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    This seemed really spritiual to me especially the images of breaking bread. It smiles of spring.
    Simply, beautiful.

    - Aly


  • PageTurner
    March 17, 2008

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    Your tender touching and tellings,
    translates well...


    "translates my winters
    to almond, orange
    and wild peach"

    Scrumptious, Scribe!

    ~ Nicky♥


  • leander Moderators member
    March 17, 2008

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    Spring is in the air (and autumn is on your side of the world) and I totally like the use of colours in this one. A great image that can prefer to both these seasons, and how I like that


  • Heath Thompson
    March 17, 2008
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    good luck with the contest Nicolette - another fine write


  • Sonja
    March 17, 2008

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    Nothing could be used better in poetry than bread. There is so many metaphors in each crumb of it and breaking a bred is a symbol of love and life... and sweetness of ripe fruit...
    ~Sonja~


  • inder silver member
    March 17, 2008
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    oops forgot

  • inder silver member
    March 17, 2008

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    sounds can cast spells

    wind through leaves,falling droplets of water,steam in a vessel,sounds of banality can lend such beauty only if we try and listen.

    A truly warm soundscape.Lovely write!


  • Leslie gold member
    March 16, 2008

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    this is such a beautiful piece with the combo of nature, I specially appreciate the birds around give such a feeling of freedom and love for some reason, when as i read i couldn't help but feel the spring... excellent job as usual.


  • arafura gold member
    March 16, 2008

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    "I break my winters
    in this bread, the body
    of leafless days..."

    As usual I stand in awe of your skill and your gentle compassion my friend. Excellent!


  • grannyeri gold member
    March 16, 2008

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    Just waiting for spring to come - the feeding of birds in the back yard or park, the warmth of the sun, the light clothes we can wear, the gardening. Alliteration works well here too.


  • Randomly Beautiful
    March 15, 2008
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    Your pieces are always musical.


  • voices
    March 15, 2008
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    no roof religion
    you have fed in ways
    words will never tell.

    you blow me away.

  • Virgoan
    March 15, 2008
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    Soft, lovely like bliss...excellent Nic

    HENSLEY

  • tara wilson gold member
    March 15, 2008

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    "and my hands multiply the sound
    of a single blossom on a branch
    to the spring orchards"

    I love those lines, I will just stay with this poem and read it over and over and sigh, I love your beautiful poetry..


  • Lyrical Soul silver member
    March 15, 2008

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    All the sounds of Spring are here. The new blossoms, the new scents and the swelling of new love. I so love this one Nicolette. Beautiful poetry my vriendin.

    ~Lyrical


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    March 15, 2008

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    Lovely poem Nicolette..my winter is ending with storm and rain, nice to see another brighter way out.


  • Utok Bulinaw
    March 15, 2008
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    Beautiful


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    March 15, 2008
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    you really can write pretty Nicolette, simply beautiful...


    al


  • marc creamore
    March 15, 2008

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    Oh how I love your heart . . . it shines through every word you write . . . As a pond gazer, I too have heard the crisp breaking of bread in the Autumn air and experienced the appreciation of birds . . . A tender and gentle love poem!


  • Mari Goes gold member
    March 15, 2008

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    Today I thought of you, of green and sent old breads to the park (birds meal) and now, I see all of that here together
    Little green leaves make me smile. And noise kids under the still soft sun let me see that it's time to say good bye to the Winter.
    Your poem is a wonderful welcome to this colourful season. Loved it!

    • Nicolette gold member
      March 15, 2008
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      Thanks, Mari!! Of course it's autumn now here in South Africa and winter is just around the corner, but the heart has its own seasons, doesn't it?


      • Mari Goes gold member
        March 15, 2008
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        And your heart and thoughts are where Spring is about to come


  • natari
    March 15, 2008

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    Your poetry just seems to blossom too.Amazing poetry from one of the best.

    ~Helen


  • And Hyetal
    March 15, 2008

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    oooh, wow. I love how the title really connected everything in the poem. And I love the bird and blossoms metaphor! ooh, and plus, I love the last two lines.

    Really beautiful! Good luck in the contest!

    ~Cassie


  • Allyce May gold member
    March 15, 2008

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    Ooooo, it's beautiful Nicolette

    I loved:

    "I break my winters
    in this bread"

    You know when you're reading a poem, and there's a bit that grabs you? And it has such an impact that you can't go on and you have to start reading from the beginning again? That was it for me!

    Everything about this is so light - the bread, the birds, the leaves and blossoms. Another sigh inducing piece!

    I want to eat a peach now and I want the sun to start shining as brightly as this poem

    • Nicolette gold member
      March 15, 2008
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      Thanks, Allyce - that part is my favourite part too. And now you make me crave a peach too, lolol ... you know...


  • zochit2me gold member
    March 15, 2008

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    Beautiful poetry. It seems to bring a calm to me as I read it. The metaphors were great and love the breaking of the bread...almost biblical. Love blooms in this poem as winter leaves us. Best of luck to you.

    Becky


  • Night Hope gold member
    March 15, 2008

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    "I break my winters
    in this bread, the body
    of leafless days"

    Sighhh...Magnificent. Elegant. Beautiful. Heartening. I know these sounds of breaking bread. I know how the birds quietly wait for us to scatter our crumbs, to toss away our sorrow, to discover Spring once more. They gather our pieces until they weave a sweet song, just for us. This is gorgeous, my Sister. I can only smile. Good luck in Mary's contest, Sweetie. Vlindertjie

  • Rowan gold member
    March 15, 2008

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    so beautifully stunning to my eyes, and heart.
    I love the colors, and season/love symbolism.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    March 15, 2008
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    lovely Nicky.

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    March 15, 2008

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    Oh, how I adore the ability of the Poetess to dive into the depths of Light. The green sunlight signifies growth, the luscious landscape of feeling like Spring. The breaking of winter's of bread into small pieces signifies to the reader that they are fed within a religious thread to be swallowed by a wagtail to be learned from as lessons, digested as part of what has been ingested,the embodiment of days where there was a state of stasis and no new leaves unitl that singular bud that blossomed, regenerating the senses, the synapses and especially liked the usage of " ripens in me" it alludes to the nourishing, natural fulfillment of fruitfullness, the reference to the translation of winter's almond, orange and peach was wonderful, indicative of new language found. Of bread and blossoms, the two basic tennnets within life, to be fed with the Staff of life itself and to feel that flowering within the self, beautiful poetry,beautiful.

    • Nicolette gold member
      March 15, 2008
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      Someday I want to see like you do, Yvette... Guy was right when he said you read and feel and see into a poem almost better than the writer herself. Thank you... of course you read right into the essence of this little poem!


  • Malabu
    March 15, 2008
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    gorgeous..

    mal


  • misselaineous
    March 15, 2008

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    this has a very deep and therapeutic tone
    i liked it very much
    i also liked the bread meatphor which works on so many different levels
    your poems always make me sigh...
    beautiful
    elaine


  • Cannonsfire
    March 15, 2008

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    You express feelings of love through a season and everyone of us is envious of it. Pure and beautiful as you are. Love, C

    • Nicolette gold member
      March 15, 2008
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      Thank you, Cheryl - you are most kind, dear friend . I was trying to link this to how the breaking of bread and the body (almost like in a religious sense) can lead to new life


  • Namita
    March 15, 2008

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    Beautiful lovesong, Nic... I'm sure your Guy's gonna love this one... the breaking and blossoming; this is beauteous.

    - namita

  • NurseChilly gold member
    March 15, 2008
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    yes yes yes

    small steps into big love.... with wing and colours of spring, summer and the phases of ripening joy

    very nice Nicci





    G.x

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