Dancing in the green,
Smiling with the colors of a new day's dawn,
A journey just begun,
Moments like this that will never come undone,
At least that is what they told you,
A fool's fantasy or a trickster's deceit,
A cruel belief…
To disguise a truth so harsh ;
It finds you while you sleep,
Where all those forced smiles…
Fade away in your dreams,
A dance between you and yourself,
Where you do not need to hide…
The truth from anybody else,
Where it’s many arms can hold you,
A liar's apathy or a blind man's empathy,
One sigh of relief…
To admit your world has fallen apart ;
How you trusted,
How you lied to yourself,
How you lusted…
To make their smiles your wishing well,
A clockwork rusted,
We all tick to a stop,
Betrayed by the politics of tock,
Struck deaf, dumb, and blind…
To the premonition you forgot ;
When all those promises crumble,
They flow through your fingers like tears of sand,
The past becomes a bitter wasteland,
The scattered ruins…
Of the hopes and dreams you had,
You struggle to find an oasis,
Long forgotten places…
That never quenched that thirst for love,
Still putting one foot in front of the other,
As you stumble through a desert of broken trust,
The heat burns your face,
Your lips crack and bleed…
Under the relentless waves of an unforgiving sun,
The years of questioning why elude you,
While miles of answers stretch out before you,
The winds give up their secrets,
Lashing you with the memories…
Of so many other seekers,
As you finally melt away into the sand,
You become just another handful…
Of what this desert is made of,
So many souls reduced to ashes,
All those broken hearts ground into dust ;
One of the nameless number,
We mingle with the memories…
Of all the others,
We hear your footsteps,
Miles to go before you can sleep,
We understand the crying,
We know the taste,
The salty rivers down your face,
Who did you trust,
Come home to us,
Melt into one,
Souls of ash,
Hearts of dust :
A contest entry
- Dust by Cannonsfire.
650 points, ended March 28, 2008, 16 entries
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Comments
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This has gret meter and flow to it, may ave overused the punctuation a little but on the whole it is a wonderful piece. Love, C

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Thanks for your time and feedback. Yeah sometimes I forget to remove or not use "music flow punctuation" when presenting a piece here. I write lyrics so that's what the punctuation is all about. Thanks again and always thrilled when someone finds something in a piece.
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I enjoyed this write. It flows with pace and accentuates the message. I'm no expert on poetry, but I would refrain from using any punctuations. Good luck. FransB


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Thanks so much, always means a great deal to hear valuable input.
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