Tangerine and touches of peach
The presence of you
then ever onward.
So “baby please, let’s talk”
Quivering in intense frigidity, bitter and hopeless, I have no wish.
She’s my greatest temptation
down memory lane
snake crosses quickly.
The pain, oh the pain….
I figured I had my memories feel blessed, for that.
Tonight’s gunna be a ‘snap’ of an adventure
liberated,
complacently in love.
Rules too
and honest smiles…No more
shall taunt thee
my love.
Author notes
Written for contest..last lines of 17 of my poems..have formed this...I'm kinda impressed thought it would come out a lot weirder lol
Great contest Idea
In a list
A contest entry
- Build A Poem with the Last Lines of Your Own Poetry! FUN! by Melodies.
600 points, ended March 16, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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interesting
Hi Cindy!
This was a very interesting idea for a contest. Has it given you any ideas on what could happen with this first draft? Or do you think you'll leave it just the way it is?
I loved the way these two lines worked together:
She’s my greatest temptation
down memory lane
There's a cool change in the weather, so I'm relieved,
BJ.
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it is an interesting idea
but no I will just be leaving it like this...only did it for the fun of the contest lol.
but yes so many work together well....so maybe...who knows
Thanks BJ
Cindy
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This is such a funny contest! hehehe... but hey, just a reminder of all your past fabulous writes sis!! Yay!
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You have some great connecting lines in this one...
She’s my greatest temptation
down memory lane. nice connection!
And the ending five lines seem to want to be together!
Good luck in this Funny contest.
All the best~
~T.S~
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thank you
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