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A picture

It keeps you standing still, forever if you will.
No way to move, a binding time.
Hold your pose, dont let go.
No blinking now, Your soul is mine.
I now own a piece of you, and forever will.
I can carry it around, tear your face-
Into a frown.
Arrange you legs, to stand on your head.
This picture of you, Will forever be true.

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  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    June 15

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    Great imagery wthin these few lines here. This flows very well indeed. I don't have a favourite line in this as I like the whole piece very much. You have shown a lot of imagination. Well done.

    Dark Wishes
    Wayne Leon


  • Rejected Easter Egg
    June 12

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    Wow this is magnificent and quite compelling. I look forward to continuing your reads for the next 45 minutes


  • an.unheard.cry
    March 16
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    i love piece
    its beautiful.
    very nice write


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    March 11

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    This is so cool!
    I love the thought that you put into this.
    Great work capturing the beauty of a photo!




    Jeremy0826


  • tenderheart22
    March 10

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    I find pictures very interesting...
    How it captures a moment and it helps you remember it forever.
    I think it was very lovely


  • xXxBloodloverxXx
    February 26
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    ITS GOOD .I LIKE YOUR IMAGINATIVE THOUGHTS.GREAT WORK.


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    February 5
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    Interestingly, convincingly strange...


  • Rheea gold member
    December 15, 2008

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    you have a picture you can fix any way you want to in your mind. Love does strange things to people.


  • Bunny luv26
    November 28, 2008

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    Very nicely done. I liked the imagery. My favorite line would have to be
    "No blinking now, Your soul is mine."
    Beautifully done!


  • Emile
    March 15, 2008

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    Good

    Very imaginative use of words and skillfully constructed. You use good imagery and maintain a poetic flow throughout the whole piece. Wonderful work with great thought given to the subject mater as it is gently unfolded for the readers delight.


  • Nephlim
    March 15, 2008

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    Pictures can be funny things, they can capture a moment, and a soul at the same time. Wouldn't it be funny if a picture grew old as you did though? Captured every change, not just remembered one stage... but that would just be strange
    GREAT job
    diggin it majorly

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