Prone in the soils of failure
nauseating blood dripping from helm
dust still afloat, from his impact
dancing in solemn death note
as does his opponent stand ravenously above;
tainted weapon still inhand
teeth exposed, not from eager smile
but for hunger, for human flesh
a thousand voices;
from a thousand lungs
jostling these men -
these men of unknown pasts
whom have never made acquaintance -
to tear each other limb
from limb
to shed their blood
on the dusty ground below
only for – what?
A sliver or two?
To feed their hungry mouths
their family in need of a single
meal
perhaps paid
by the death of another man.
Author notes
This was really hard to write, since I really don't usually write like this... I kinda had to force my way through it.. But, that's ok... heh =]
Prompt:
Roman Colosseum Battle... thing... =D
In a list
A contest entry
- Photo Prompt --- #3 --- No rules by pantress.
600 points, ended March 26, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be honest here.
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so beautiful!!
the very best of luck
urs,
truthlover -
Gorey!
Phew...I'm on my way to
& now I'm gonna be dreaming Ben Hur! I'm glad to see this was a contest. I was surprised to see this. Wasn't expecting doom & gloom, or a tale spun so well that I could see it in my mind's eye in graphic detail. Job well done...ugh...so well I'm nauseated! 
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The Battle Still Rages
I came here to return the favor - this write tells it like it was and is - will mankind ever learn from the past - I suppose not becasuse evil men and woman are in power - to wage war at will - what a waste ehhh? - Bless God - Joe - (Dobar Dan)
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I give you a lot of credit - I don't think I could have written one word for a prompt such as this. Very vivid and I enjoyed reading.
WW -
After reading several of your other poems I was thinking maybe you couldn't write darker.
This is very good. Glad you decided to try another direction. -
Yeah, much darker than I've read from you. No less great though. Vivid imagery. Well done! Good luck in the contest!
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This is really good. I have read a few of your poems now and you are very talented. I can't wait to read more. Keep writing and I will keep reading
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i like the imagry used in this poem
a good write. -
I have not seen the pic, but i can see the scene, we see it every day in the news in movies in our nightmares.
You depicted the inner fate of humanity, battle for whatever reason, to eat, to survive, to protect, to gain power it matters not.
Every good poem, i read it and saw it.
Blessed Be
Allura
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Forced or not forced, you entered, and I am glad. You know its my picture and I don't even know if I could write this one. I tend to write more from real life as opposed to my imagination, (for I don't have one.lol). Best of luck in my contest. jennifer
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