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From Across a Crowed Room

As you modify the present;
such as all;
until the end of time.
Two halves of a whole they are,
and poetry is limitless.
And I your guardian demon,
but now the angel is walking away
in shades of pain.
I am not normal!
And that will never change.
Then, I might believe in eternity again.
My light is always bright,
I dare you to make me stop;
and subside once more again.
Protect yourself;
my love and life with you.

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This was insane. It doesn't make any sense at all! Hahaha! Hope you enjoyed it. Muhaha. I might make one with the last lines of all my poems and then one with the first lines of all my poems. Hehe

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  • DrunkenRam
    March 23, 2008

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    Wow! this bounced around more than a rubber ball in a clothes dryer, a conglomeration of excellent lines, individually they are all pretty darned good, but you mixed them all together like sentence stew hehe.
    I think you did this intentionally didn't you.
    nice work.


    • Simply Simple
      March 23, 2008
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      Well, I had to use the last lines of my last 17 poems... Hehe. I can't help that it made no sense. Thank you.


  • Melodies
    March 16, 2008

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    Oh, I love this poem so much...

    It must be karma. Your poetry has been hiding this secret message all this time. How that you have assembled the lines, this fabulous poem appears to show us THE BEST POEM EVER WRITTEN! Every line flows perfectly and honestly... it all makes sense to me.

    lol I am crazy, but anyways...


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    March 15, 2008

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    I am not normal!
    and that will never change.
    Is the only bit I think that makes any sense. I like it, this made me chuckle the 'I am not normal' describes the poem perfectly .

  • lyrebird gold member
    March 14, 2008

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    Oooh wow.
    This is brilliant!
    And I love the idea of a guardian demon instead of an angel.

    • Simply Simple
      March 14, 2008
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      Yay! Thankies Jojo. The actual poem that line came from is entitled "Your Guardian Demon" This was just a bunch of random garble. Lol Hehe But I found it amusing

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