Flickering lights passing
like shooting stars,
counting time to the
white stripes streaming
past my foggy window,
Smooth black loneliness
checkered with neon
and fluorescent paint
~Newport Pleasure~
~Kids under 12 eat and stay free~
cigarette smoke lingers
like Jay and Silent Bob,
my eyes blinking to the
sway of the wiper blades.
Cavernous overpasses looming,
lighted by a thousand
faceted halogen bulbs
I hear the call
of the open road
Author notes
Written December 2nd, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- My First Contest by Dave Powell.
450 points, ended March 7, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - All walks of life by SilverWolf.
335 points, ended July 9, 2008, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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wow i love this!!
short but o i love it so! -
The imagery in this poem is very striking and I had to read the poem several times to enjoy them. Very nicely done.
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wonderful...very serene in an esscence...
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oh my gosh the imagery in this made me want to take to the road with you!!!...brilliant just brilliant...i loved this piece!!...hugs..leanne xxx
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oh this one rocks i like it alot
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Alright...this one sounds very natural...would like to have heard this go on...Great original images....I want to tell you to go for it...never settle until the right word makes it thru all the ordinary places it could take...wait for it to POP, then catch it off guard...but only the best word. this is a wonderful start.
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I really liked this, it struck me as a kind of dystopian image. If you've read Brave New World, I'd almost think this had a little tribute to that, the way everything is manufactured.
But as someone who used to travel a lot, I can relate to a lot of the images you've created here, and as a Kevin Smith fan, i love the reference- even if it is blatant.
Nicely done, another great piece. -
YAY! Wonderful job! I travel alot and well thats just awsome! Great description vivid thoughts! Great write!! Very well done!! .................Sheila =o)
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