Oh my love
while uncoupling the laminations of your skin
I discovered your comeliness masked
though it had its own rule for the facsimiles
since after sleeping with you
whenever I weighed myself
in a way that now how much I know you
I found myself blank
which made me to dig up you once again
and by the end consequences were not new
while I were betokened as an old man
meanwhile
Oh my love...
Author notes
To me, the nude body of the men have no relevance if we do not look this issue with reference to the nude bodies of the women. And if we look this issue in this scenario, then the status and its concept is defined in a different manner where the nude body of the men are the secondary issue while exploring the possibilities of its own existence matching with the nude bodies of the women.
A contest entry
- Male Nude: Does It Offend You? by LilyAngel.
650 points, ended May 2, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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curious pic and and powerful phraseology. good altogether, and likeable. however, the view on female and male nudes in the notes is debatable. if one could see the male nude only in relation to the female nude, that would just let the commercialization of the female body go on and cater only to the male viewers, benefitting their fantasies. And when someone makes a statement like the one you have made, it discounts the validity of female perspectives on nudity and pleasure. I believe it's high time we stop such unnecessary gender discrimination - no matter what you call it...art or spirituality. I say this with all due respects, and i like your poem despite these issues.
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Such depth...Im left in thought....Very nice piece my friend...
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thanx for the entry and good luck in my conteset
lets see i must admit that this isnt what i was expecting... not that its bad LOL.
"and by the and consequences were not new
while I were betokened as old meanwhile"
i really liked these lines
xxx he broke me -
:)
Excellent work, prabhuji.
discovered your comeliness masked
though it had its own rule for the facsimiles
quite deep and thoughtful!
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