Its been a while since you talked to me,
I thought you'd gone for good,
No more whispers, that's what I'd hoped,
No more telling me that I should.
4th of Jan, thats when we last spoke,
I was off my face, you were chillingly sober,
And those words that you said to me,
Made me believe it was time it was over.
But the next day came and again I was fine,
I survived that night of endless bad dreams,
Of you putting me down and spreading self doubt,
But now your back or so it seems.
And the tiny thoughts, that you send my way,
Ideas of how I can end this misery,
To just let go from it all,
To help myself, to set me free.
So here I sit talking to you,
Wondering if I really want to give in,
'Cause what you say is mostly true,
But I shouldn't give up, just because you say I can't win.
I decide the answer is plain and simple,
All comes down to the simple facts,
That you hate me, and I hate you,
Doesn't need to be any more exact.
Trouble is there's always a twist,
And in this case, as you may have already guessed,
That who I hate and who hates me,
Are one in the same, there I confess.
A contest entry
- Monster in my head... Quickie by Rebekah-Ann.
550 points, ended November 17, 17 entries
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Very interesting write.
I don't know if this is just a poem or if it is really something that you experience.
If it is real, then I would suggest that you see someone about it.
Suicide is a real danger and I lost a friend not long ago with the same problem.
Best of luck to you
Love
Sonya
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hey best someone tells you my friend
monsters in the head are very common
peel aways the layers
you would be amazed at the beauty that you are
love the honesty
quite brave and deep
amazing to read
God bless you my friend...
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Trouble is there's always a twist,
And in this case, as you may have already guessed,
That who I hate and who hates me,
Are one in the same, there I confess.
Wow I love this stanza.. You did an amazing job on this write and I really enjoyed reading this. I'd love to hear it read aloud. Keep up the great writing and good luck in the contest and in everything you do. -
Michael, I am back my friend so now I will be keeping a sharp eye on you! You better get your English ass back on here and writing my friend!
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I am around just not writing as much as I used too, but wrote a new poem last week and got ideas floating around in my head. Good to see you back mate.
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very goo. reitten sweetly. god right.
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mhm, Michael man this is a really deep write that is almost scary to read but know man if you need to talk about whatever then seriously get a hold of me and we will talk over whatever you need to mate. Hang in there and remember this, your a whole helluva a lot stronger then a voice, you have your own voice, you have a body that can stop it and you have a mind that is strong...hang in there mate, get a hold of me if need be. Peace n' Love, JT
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very good poem. Got it! Keep writing!
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wow very true for some ppl
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wow thats deep. just remember your own worst enemy is truly yourself
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cute! love it. is it about her again?
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No its was about the voice in my head trying to push me over the edge again. When i wrote this i was feeling just generally down.
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swete, really, loved it!
ME
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