I wish you would come see me, i'm lost without you
my smile is broken today... fix it for me
I cant sing you love songs anymore
I never believed them in the first place
I know you'll never understand
but what hurts the most is knowing you never tried.
Its already too late, the best thing that came from all of this
is the only part I must have missed.
I'm not okay... how are you?
you dont need to bother, i dont need to be.
sometimes i hurt myself so you cant hurt me
but I hope you hurt when you think about me
did we all fall down?
I want to gather all my tears
and fucking drown you in them
If nothing lasts forever will you be my nothing?
A contest entry
- SHORT POEMS PART 2 by Blooming Poet.
700 points, ended March 23, 2008, 129 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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Oh! My! God! How open!
What a piece! Remarkable wording, and an enchanting poem of a love in question... I propose that you will find in the end, the truth, in the simple journey to maintain, the openness of your mind...!
"In the certain advance of excellence, lays a heart and soul who remains open"!
Great writing!
Wow!
~ James ~ -
Yeah, I saw those last lines on photobucket. Also, I recognize a few things from My Chemical Romance. "Did we all fall down?" is from The Desert Song and "I'm not okay" from I'm Not Okay (I Promise). Nice allusions, if that was what you were aiming at.
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i love how the beggining it sounds like a sad love poem and then I discover the ending, which wowed me. escpecailly:
I want to gather all my tears
and fucking drown you in them
i have felt that way before, just was to shy to say it. great work -
I seen that last line quoted somewhere. Can't remember who said it. Best wishes.
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