When he was young, tragedy took his dad,
So he grew up in the role as the man.
I never heard him complain of what he never had-
He had an optomisum that nothing could kill.
It was to no surprise to me
When he grew up and became a soldier.
I say that the military got lucky,
Seeing as life taught him what they teach.
When he went over to fight in that war
He left his young wife behind-
But he also left so much more.
He left the mom that needed him so much.
He also left two very young kids behind-
His brother and sister that he had all but raised.
His little brother is one of a kind,
Wanting to be a soldier like 'bubba' is.
Now he is back home safe, praise God above.
America could not ask for a better soldier,
A man that I know will always serve with love.
My family is blessed to be able to know him.
Author notes
This poem was written for Brandon, a dear family friend that went over to Iraq, but thankfully made it back again. He is a very special young man, as are his wife, mom, and brother and sisters. America is lucky to have him behind it.
A contest entry
- Soldiers by darkangelcutter.
400 points, ended March 19, 2008, 18 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Ok, there are a few problems...
1.When he was young tragedy took his dad-Place a comma after young.
2. When he grew up and become a soldier-It should read "became"
3. Seeing as life taught him what they teach-I have no idea what this means.
4. My family are blessed to be able to know him-My family "is" blessed to be able to know him
Sorry for all the input, it's just for a gold I feel these things should be fixed.
All in all, it's a good poem!
M -
i really like this i reminds me of something that i could not put my finger on but anyway i really like this good luck in the contest
shannon
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nice job, thank God for soldiers.
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