Nightmares Thundering,
Into my mind
Leaving my soul
In a touch of time
Look at me Now
In the facade of you
Dont cry those tears
They will not come true
All of the lonliness
All of the tears
All of the facades
Distingushed by fear
Look me in the eyes
And lie to me still
Just dont look in my soul,
Because
You will see my lies too
My mind is a endless
Turmoil.
A endless Lie
That was not to be born.
Nightmares Thundering,
Into my mind,
Leaving my soul,
In a touch of time.
Look at me Now,
In the facade of you,
Dont cry those tears,
They will not come true.
All These Seas,
These Fears,
This tease;
The world cant revolve,
Unless a new lie is formed.
You cant continue,
Going without the new lies,
That you create in your mind,
Every new day.
Stop lying to yourself;
But I know you wont.
Dont look out,
Because you are already gone.
Nightmares Thundering,
Into my mind,
Leaving my soul,
In a touch of time;
Look at me now,
In the facade of you,
Dont cry those tears;
They will not come true-
Quite frankly my dear,
I dont give a damn.
Author notes
Dragonbabyx3
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Comments
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Nice ending lines...Gone with the wind I do believe. My mother's favorite movie. D:
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It's a good write, but the format kind of threw me off.
I like it though.
Thanks for entering.
Stay sick.
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All in all it's a fairly ok write, the repetition is ok but perhaps some punctuation would help it along and that might make the repetition flow together better. Thanks for the entry
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In the facade of you
All of the facades
Repetition and bad grammar spoil this for me,along with lack of punctuation.
last line chosen sums it up for me. sorry.
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Nice rhythm and rhyme, with very emotive words. Splendid job!!!
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Depressions sucks. And it happens. It will drive you insane. I liked the repetition of the one bit, gave it a lyrics sort of feel to the piece. A feeling.. That has you jonesing to it.. Follow it along, the voice growing an octave higher as the piece continues, and finally.. It ends flat.. Quite frankly my dear, I don't give a damn. Very good.
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what a rant! lovely stuff.
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