you're the reason,
im lying here,
dying here,
i've been crying too,
as your song plays,
soft..beautiful..and tenderly,
it makes me weak,
and you're my death song,
i died there,
just lying there,
crying there,
and all i could hear,
was your sweet song,
on my death bed,
so clear was my head,
then there was that song,
the song that made me cry,
as i slowly slipped away,
your song sweetly did play,
know you know you're my death song...
A contest entry
- D is for Death Note by BlueMoon Goddess.
500 points, ended May 24, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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This is really good. There are a few typos and spelling mistakes that take away from it though. In lines 2 and 3 it is lying and dying. and the next to last line I think you meant song instead of sog. The last line I am not if you meant NOW you know instead of "know you know". Overall a good poem though. Thanks for sharing
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This was simply amazing, I loved it! The only thing I ask is are you talking about a show or character, cause if you are please tell me.
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