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Bound and delivered (Dark Angel)

Oh angel, tied in disgrace, hidden face,
now, bound by lies and deceit, dost thou weep?
As earthbound form displays thine fallen grace,
(In morbid pain so deep), are thou asleep?

The pillars placed as ropes will coil, tears flow,
for there is no release from thy great pain.
Your destiny decided, so long ago.
Dost thou now seek thine heartless love regained?

Tis sad to see such greatness fall from heights
that won't be ever reached by mortal men.
But it is justice, for angel set sights
on drying ink that flows from witty pen.

So pull and flap your wings, in pained torment
for what is left of love is now unspent.






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  • November-Dani
    December 15, 2008

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    Wow, deep. And so dark! Wonderful. Thank you so much for this amazing entry. Well done and best of luck to you.

    Dani.


  • Walking Oxymoron gold member
    November 12, 2008

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    Dost thou seek your sanity regained?

    Love that line.. Like the idea of it being in that kinda 'old' English which gives it a more 'authentic' (not the word I wanted, but cannot remember the other) feel.

    It adds something, anyway.
    Thanks for entering.


  • Ti Amo Te Quiero
    November 9, 2008
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    Very nice!! Thanks for entering and good luck


  • Ephiphany
    July 8, 2008

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    Again

    I thought you did a wonderful job with this piece.
    Keep writing, I really enjoyed this and good luck.

    -e


  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    May 1, 2008

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    I like this poem, however, it doesn't really fit as a prose piece. Regardless, an enjoyable read.
    Rory


  • LadyDementia gold member
    April 26, 2008

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    Fab poem...still But you have broken the word limit rather a lot...lol. It is for no more 35 words You do have time to edit or resubmit a new one...would love it if you did

  • LadyDementia gold member
    April 9, 2008
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    Stunning poem!

    Superbly done, I wouldn't change a thing. Got to be my fave of your so far. It doesn't skip a beat! A gorgeous read, keep quilling


  • BigE
    April 9, 2008

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    It was a great attempt, but I felt like if you were going to choose a styl of writing, stick with it. Thanks for entering.


    • Dark Otter
      April 9, 2008
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      Hi!

      What does your comment mean?

      • BigE
        April 14, 2008
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        When I read your poem, I felt like it didn't match up. The pronouns and such. Like I said, great attempt, but I felt like you could have stuck with one or the other (in my opninion).


  • Mirrors shard
    April 6, 2008
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    lovely imagery and creativity


  • Lady Australis silver member
    April 5, 2008
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    wow this is amazing i loved it
    well done


  • Ephiphany
    April 4, 2008
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    Very thought provoking piece

    my friend, very well spoken so glad to have you here to share your talent from within.

    Ephiphany

  • LadyDementia gold member
    March 16, 2008
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    A deep dark piece, I like it. You have told a wonderful tale with your words, giving beautiful imagery along the way. A superb poem. Good luck in the contest

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