I'm close to the end of yet another day
Upon the tears my feelings float away-
I've been there before, all this is not new
It will leave me weary, I know that too..
I wish my words would get the power again,
The power I once had that eased my pain..
For once, I wish my pen would work tonight
Maybe then I'll smile for once in this dying light..
But my wounded soul is deep in agony too
Torturing memories leave me cold and blue
Alone I am, alone is my fate to be
For once I named myself "Lonely"
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Author notes
I wish I could be me again.. I'm going through a horrible writers block.. and its really torturing :S
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Writer's block? This is you with a writer's block?
Na-uh young lady! This is a fab write. I wish my writer block poetry was this good. Such a sad poem. But well, sad poetry is just filled with beauty. I've always loved sad and dark poetry. I just wish I was just as good with them as you are! Great work!
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Excellent
I'm still in the grip of a writers block so I know how you feel. You still managed to write this piece well with plenty of feeling and a lot of imagery.
Bill
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Round Two...lol
Hey, Don't worry you won't be alone for long... in a few years time you'll get married and then probabaly you'll change your id to "Hum Do" heheh...
"I wish my words would get the power again"
You should take "words" to Gym to build up their biceps...lol
leaving joke aside; It is very sad... a small occurence can etch an impression deep within us for the rest of our life... and it haunts us time and time again.. despite millions people around us but we feel all alone...
Sorry for the brevity in my first time critiqe, you know I was in "jaldi mein"
... take care...
mina
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I know exactly what you mean and where you're coming from... it's so frusterating to me that I can't write as often or as well as I used to when I was younger, and I've missed reading your lovely words, as well.
Maybe someday, the sun of our muses will shine on us again.
Kate
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Excellent poem with a great rhyming pattern and smooth rhythm that erupting straight from the soulful heart.
my favourite lines:
I wish my words would get the power again,
The power I once had that eased my pain..
WOW! amazingly beautiful...and wonderful ending lines...keep writing...thank you -
Beautiful definition of Lonely
nice flow and smooth rhyming...
mina
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-Hugs-
I feel the same way so many days, for I could be in a crowed room and feel lonely. I'm not always happy go lucky.. I just try and help others smile, because I'm so aware of the trials of this world.
Peace, Timothy
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