Choking mouth evidenced
across paragraphed pages.
Indentations resemble market racks.
ISBN flashing grins with sale sticker.
I hate paper pretend.
Youth develops dexterity
Why not excise them on bound backs?
Soaking meanings with the ocular
makes for deep declines in relapse.
Hand-drawn stallions flexing quarters
Pillowed whore spills curled braids
Two-buttoned savior over crested
Glazen gaze to tempt your boredom.
Dreamer, dreamer, dreamer
Wasted forest for such overgrowth
I despise your gilded name
Copyright is wrong to be right.
At least in this instance
Oh, to only strike a match
And burn for a greater cause
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Author notes
I hate paperback romances
A contest entry
- What makes you passionate? by TabbyCat.
900 points, ended March 24, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Say What You Need To Say by Blooming Poet.
300 points, ended April 14, 2008, 46 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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average score 79.5
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Title: 5/5- Love it!
Venting: 35/50- This is the best poem I have found on this site in a long time. However, for the purpose of this contest I feel that you didn't quite meet the requirements. You seemed to be describing why you feel how you do, rather than the way you feel. (red tape, I suppose)
My Personal Like/Dislike: 15/15- Fantastic!
Followed Rules: 20/20- Perfect
Grammer/Spelling: 10/10- wonderful use of form!
Total: 85/100
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Title: 4/5- alomst too cliche
Venting: 30/50- you could of said more
My Personal Like/Dislike: 10/15- I don't hate it but I don't love it
Followed Rules: 20/20- Perfect
Grammer/Spelling: 10/10- No problems
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Oh my, this cut on the bias and makes for an "A" line skirt that does not skirt the issue, yes and yes forever and ever Amen, it is a waste of paper, forrests and trees when those that play pretend with paper leave us ill at ease. A feisty write, liked the play on copy righting that which is wrong, Neat, undiluted poetry that deserves to be drunk too, Cheers!
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Wow...interesting piece, although I didn't really know what you were talking about until I saw your author's notes. I was supicious of something in that realm around stanza 3...but didn't know exactly what. In hindsight, having read your notes, the poem is very well written. I really enjoyed reading it the second time. Good luck in the contest!
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"I hate paperback romances" why?
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lol, just a preference, i guess...im sure i might get some hate mail for this...but im sure there are some out there that cant understand my passion for priceguides either
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ah, i thought there might be a super thought out reason as to why so i thought i'd ask. i hate them too.
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actually there is in a sense, but i dont want angry responses, for i know there are those who love them
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Wow okay that was a great poem. A little unclear to me but I really liked it, in it's own way. Good job
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I don't really share your distaste for paperback romance novels...but You've made your opinion very clear in this eloquent piece. To be quite honest, I didn't know exactly what you were getting at until I read the author's notes. Could be my problem, not yours. Anyways, this was still obviously a very well-thought out poem, and I thank you for entering it in my little contest.
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