Skin Needs Skin
Into my arms
you lie here,
naked, as always…
Your soft skin
warms to the caresses
of my touch…
For our day is done…
Our skin needs skin
and each other…
Kiss me m’love…
Let me show you
the love I feel for you…
Allow our passion
to set a fire
where it counts…
Let our fires
burn each others souls
with that passion…
A passion that can only
come with love…
The true love we have…
M’Lady, you are mine
as I am yours…
Our skin needs each others…
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After the Love is Made
Our passions have dimmed,
our eyes grow weary,
not from looking at each other
but, from the afterglow of love…
After the love is made
we snuggle together
letting our breaths
come back to normal…
Our skin glistens with the moisture
produced with such passion
that we showed each other
yet again…
Join with me, again, M’lady,
for my passion still rises
let it burn within you
and set fire to your loins…
After the love is made
once again,
feel my skin as I feel yours
allow our passions to subside…
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MELT...
Let your eyes now close,
M’lady…
M’love…
IMAGINE…
Our love freely flows
between us …
IMAGINE…
Your eyes have turned
from pools of fire,
during passion,
to pools of sleep…
That passion has merely cooled,
for now…
IMAGINE…
Close your eyes
M’lady, for it is time…
IMAGINE…
Feel with me…
Our love melds
deep within our souls…
IMAGINE…
Let us now hold
each other close…
Close your eyes,
M’love…
IMAGINE…
Let my soul surround you…
Close your eyes,
as I kiss your sweet lips…
IMAGINE…
And into my soul…
allow yourself
to MELT…
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© Jonathan Wikkins March 14, 2008
All Rights Reserved
A contest entry
- Skin by Heart Sutra.
1000 points, ended May 6, 2008, 41 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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You have some lush imagination and romance going on here in this poetry.
Great stuff.
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Oh my. This is quite some set of poems that you have penned in here! lol It seems like you or just a very passionate person in general or you have a new love that just really tickles your fancy. I could just hear your mind churning as you were writing this. There is lots of vivid thought going on here.
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these are all nice, however ilike the last one the best, I even like the stanza which is not normally one of my fav, but this goes so well with the words best of luck in the contest!
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Out of your Three poems, I would say I like the last one best. But all are very well written indeed.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
All the best,
~T.S~
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very cool - best of luck in the contest
They are very good
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Oooh very nice! I like number two the most, such beautiful imagery portrayed, I am quite jealous! I do hope you get yours published, I am not quite as good at writing this genre as you but, I like trying
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In the fourth stanza of the first poem, you used two instances of the word "love" near enough together to be a bit redundant. You did the same with "fire" and "fires" in the fifth and sixth stanzas.
I really do like this piece. It's very vivid, and one of the more poetically devoted pieces I've seen. Very well done.
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In the first stanza, last line, the comma is unnecessary, and serves to hamper the flow of your poetry.
In the second, first line, perhaps "the love" would be better as "our love?" Just a thought, please don't be offended.
The third stanza is a little vague. Somehow it gives the impression that you're marking within an inch of the target, but never actually hitting it. The first line makes a lot of sense, but after that, it's a bit awkward.
The use of the word "loins" is a little archaic, and because much of the rest of the poem is more of a modern feel - except for your predilection for "m'lady" - it doesn't quite fit in.
Same advice for the last stanza as I had for the second.
This one is somehow very clear while, at the same time, it's hard to feel like I really understand it. I did enjoy the poetry, though. Lovely work. Understand, please, that my criticism is only to try and help you make your work the best it can be.
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I'm going to leave the last one off until I have the time to look at it properly. Thank you for your time! lovely work, and I really did enjoy reading it.
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