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come let's burn a sun by the shore

and paint the ash across the sky,

 

lend our longings to this night,

a star for every moment.

 

tie your unsung songs to mine

and between a sigh and a heartbeat

we will pitch our moon.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Mari Goes gold member
    July 7

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    This is lovely! The moon is my favourite subject in poetry, and here you show a new imagery related to the moon...'pitch our moon'
    The thought made me smile


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    August 4, 2008

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    humm..why not?.. especially when lovers have the heart of the poets..ah..wonderful indeed...well done..and my thanks for sharing it...


  • marlene47 silver member
    May 31, 2008

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    Wistfully spoken. Liked the ash across the sky.
    Thank you for your entry in this contest.
    Marlene


  • Mallig gold member
    April 4, 2008

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    This is beautiful, in language and sentiment. I loved
    "lend our longings
    to this night,
    a star for every moment." The last stanza has such wonderful, emotional imagery. Excellent!


  • Kari gold member
    March 14, 2008

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    Beautiful language in this piece and I love that image.
    I almost sighed when I read that last line because I was so caught up in this piece when I read it lol.
    Short but very moving.

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