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The lonely tree

She used to sit on the comforting chair,
in autumn, under the dancing tree
the wind would whip through her golden hair
and there, she felt relieved and free

the red leaves wave in content,
glad to have some company
the trees colour starts to shed
and the sun turns into bronzing honey

she comes back every year
always in autumn, under her tree
under the protective boughs she feels no fear
and around them is a sense of mystery,

but one autumn she does not come back
to her special place of releasing freedom
the trees, once healthy bark, turns deathly black
a gentle, lively wave of a branch becomes seldom

there the tree stands forever more
no one there, but the hopeful chair
now the sadness, deep in the trees core
and in death and decay it will always despair.


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Option: 4.d
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http://www.sairaq.org/wordpress/images/redtree.jpg
I'm inksplatterskitty but I might have entered your contest as bookwormykitty.

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  • nilav
    July 5, 2008

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    this is really beautiful with its flowing rhyme...the words bringing sadness of the loneliness as is inevitable with the passage of time ....

  • kales4
    June 15, 2008

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    Thank you for entering my contest. This is a really interesting poem. I love the imagery of the tree decaying. Nice write and good luck


  • One Angry Monkey
    June 6, 2008

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    good work on this one. I liked it, and although you've got things you can work on as you become a better poet, i think that you're writing very well all ready.


  • BleedingDeep
    June 1, 2008

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    WOW this is teriffic...I love this. this will be one of favorite pomes tht eneter the contest.


  • brightsmylesxx
    May 13, 2008

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    I'm surprised this poem hasn't won more trophies! But its not the trophies that really count, it's the beauty of your poem. Which is fantastic. The imagery here is just fantastic. I really loved this!

    ~ Bright Smyles


  • xCandieKissesx
    May 3, 2008

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    Wow! Lovely write! The rhyme was "okay" but the imagery was great! I like the picture you chose as your inspiration. It's about Autumn and I love Seasons! Perhaps because they are so beautiful to watch and different when they change. Great job and good luck in my contest!

    + Jackie ♥


  • IT Refugee
    April 25, 2008

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    Wow, I don't think this one got near enough credit. It's just beautiful from beginning to end. The imagery, the flow, the poignancy. Just great stuff!

  • cdudecosner
    April 17, 2008

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    I liked the imagery. It's true that everyone has a place that means a great deal to them. We return there as often as we can to feel the warmth that we know is waiting there for us. Sometimes, we are just unable to return. I believe that represents a time of "moving on" in our lives, when we have to leave our old memories behind, and search for new ones. Very well written, I enjoyed reading this!


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    April 13, 2008

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    Thanks for sharing your thoughts
    Words that speak, the feelings shared and the wealth of nature blended
    Julie


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    March 21, 2008

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    Excellent Write I like it Great imagery
    Thank you for taking the time to enter this into my contest I wish you the best of luck


  • nobodys-girl
    March 21, 2008

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    i love it! i love the nature feel to it and all the emotion wrapped up in the tree. it makes me think of when i see someone all the time doing something and the small amount of hurt it brings when one day they just arn't there anymore. thankyou so much for entering my contest and good luck!


  • Zane Rose
    March 15, 2008

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    wow. i loved how you made it seem like the tree was alive. This was wonderfully written. I loved it. Good job!!!
    Thank you for entering my contest!
    ~EJ~

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