An eye sore to the world,
from the eyes of a worm.
So unnoticed,
I知 invisible.
Pushed back to the wall
still learning to crawl
So complexed,
I知 forgotten.
An eye sore to the world
from the eyes of a germ.
So diseased,
I知 crippled.
Pushed back to the ground
Left crying with no sound.
So unwanted,
I知 leaving.
An eye sore to the world
from the words of a girl.
So pale,
I知 nauseous.
Pushed away from her grasp
Suddenly breath collapse.
So hurtful
I知 bitter.
An eye sore to the world
from the words of a pearl
So wasted,
I知 disolving.
Pushed down coughing dirt.
Silenced by the hurt.
So silenced,
I知 muted.
A contest entry
- "She Must Be The Saddest Girl To Ever Hold A Martini." by SliptheFlitch.
300 points, ended August 28, 2008, 17 entries
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Beautifully heartbreaking; this rips my heart to shreds as the pure emotions washes up like a whale on shore - scared, alone and unsure of the future ...
Brilliant poem hun
♥
Stay safe
Love to You
~Manda
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Well, I have to say that I really liked this poem..It is very good and this was my favorite part:
An eye sore to the world
from the words of a pearl
So wasted,
I’m disolving.
Pushed down coughing dirt.
Silenced by the hurt.
So silenced,
I’m muted.
I just thought that was amazing. Just out of curiosity, what do you mean by 'words of a pearl'? just a question. This poem was very well done.
Slip
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This is beautiful.
I especially like the third stanza.
The lines :
Pushed away from her grasp
Suddenly breath collapse.
Sadden me in a way I cannot describe.
The last stanza is wonderful and really ends the poem well.
Well done =] Another beautiful poem, I love it.
Arc-En-Ciel--x
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Rejection can be a powerful thing, I hope you learn to use it as a strengthening tool, it builds character.
nice write on a delicate subject.
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Wow, Ijust love your writing! It is so interesting. It is sad! Interesting! Keep writing! :-)
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awe, I wish you wouldn't talk to yourself like this. You are a nice and great person. Clearly you don't think you are attractive, but honestly, one of the best lovers I ever had, was not very attractive, but was confident, you can change that.
You expressed yourself well in this, clear images and emotions. I always feel weird applauding in situaions like this, it seems like clapping at someones pain. So I applaud you in your expression.
blessings,
Michelle
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