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Sublimely simple smoothly sings,
straightforward the lesson brings.
for lacking frills explains the word
and being intricate in truth absurd
.20 words only
A contest entry
- Quickie by GreenHrtPaleMoon.
450 points, ended March 13, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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You have written this so well. I loved the alliteration in the first line. And you have managed to write something so well in so few words. wEll done.
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You did.
I think that you are much better at this than I am. I like it when you are challenged to say something in a few words. Once I was asked to say in ten words or less something to a lawyer. So I retorted can you sum up anything in ten words or less? -
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very impressive. wonder how you control the words!
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Nicely alliterative, Bazza. See, you can write short lines and short poems. I see the contest is over so I can't wish you good luck in it. Anyhow, I liked it.
Nice to see you - don't be a stranger round my stuff.
~M~
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Very cleverly written! Exellent! Good luck in the contest!
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Simply great. I love the flow and I like your take on the prompt. Good write.
Ken
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Thank you for entering my contest. Excellent use of assonance. Best of luck!
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A great twenty words. Nice assonance and depth. You did a great job. I enjoyed the read. Hope you do well in the contest.
Kelli
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