Words need not
follow their meanings;
simplicity,
all but simple.
Truth be told,
simplicity is
quite complicated,
such as all.
Author notes
Well... I realize the title isn't very original. Anyway, this is what I came up with. Hope you enjoyed it. ^.^
A contest entry
- Quickie by Age of Rain.
450 points, ended March 13, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comment honestly please. But don't be rude. CONSTRUCTIVE CRISTISM is welcome. But don't bash me; I work hard.
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True, complicated...but true.
a lot like life, not everything is as it seems, or should be, nicely stated write.
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Thank you. ^.^
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I personally liked this entry the best.
I hope you do well with it.
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Thank you. ^.^
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Orginality is in application as well as inspiration. Good take on the prompt. Now my critique: First line - Words must need not. It feels like you were stretching this line get to 20 words. "Words need not" would have been better feeling. This would release a word count for later use to emphasize your point. Same thing with the word "because". With two free word you could add emphasis to your ending with "like love" or "like life" illustrating "complexity".
We each have our own path... I hope this gives you another door to open in exploring your options for expression. I look forward to reading more of you.
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Thank you for the advice. I will revise this soon. ^.^
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Thank you for entering my contest. Excellent grasp on the true nature of simplicity. Best of luck.
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