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Secrets

cyberspace expands secret perception,
deception dances stanzas across screen
as romance releases rapture's escape,
shapes beckon desire's deliverance.

reality explodes angel's departure,
exposure melts away vanilla dreams
streaming sadness against obligations
as solitude sneaks into my fragile soul.

coffee stained memories circle confusion
as words stumble regret's futile hindsight.

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  • amaranthine lover gold member
    May 1, 2008
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    I really like this, insane and abstract and cool thanks for entering


  • PainfulPleasures
    March 15, 2008

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    Love the alliteration, and the imagery is beautifully dark. The entire thing flows wonderfully, really liked the first two lines.


  • Blueskywonder
    March 14, 2008

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    A Sad piece full of emotion. Are we decieved or do we decieve ourselves?
    Great poem mate!


  • delightfulmess silver member
    March 14, 2008

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    You sure nailed an emotion I am sure so
    many of us here at ap feel or certainly at least have felt.

    As always your poetic vocab is sensational!!!!

    Not to mention I love "rolling rhyme." That is what I call it when the last word of a line rhymes with the first of the next. There is probly a technical term for it, But I dont know it. ~shruggs shoulders~ In fact I have a form I have been tinkering with that uses this type of rhyme.

    You are outstanding... I will stop blabbing now
    and simply say bravo my friend.


    Delila


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    March 14, 2008

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    the secrets of cyberspace...deceptions dance...desires deliverance...coffee stained memories...stumbled regrets into a fragile soul...heart breaking!  such sadness pouring from your pen


  • elemental angel
    March 14, 2008

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    wonderfully written, full of truth and wonderfully dark imagery.
    Bravo


  • individuality gold member
    March 14, 2008

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    so many minds in this cyber existence, there will be some that decieve us, i think here too of separate lives, time spent online away from love while searching for smiles in loneliness. a good poem


  • tara wilson gold member
    March 13, 2008

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    yes...it is so easy to be deceived... more so, I think in cyberspace..dark and well written...


  • cheaphotelsign
    March 13, 2008
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    made me sad...a passionate write of elegant language...beautiful darkness trembling.

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