Did something I shouldn't have
Said something I shouldn't have
And now I'm standing here
Wondering how to go on
My life is gone
Gone with my love
And now I'm regreting here
Wondering how to go on
What's the point in still living?
All it will bring is pain
And now I'm remaning here
Wondering how to go on
Maybe I should end it all
Now, before it's too late
And now I'm existing here
Wondering how to go on
Should I jump?
All my worries...gone
And now I'm poised here
Wondering how to go on
Never having to think again
Never having to love again
And now I'm thinking here
Wondering how to go on
Said something I shouldn't have
Did something I shouldn't have
And now I'm standing here
Wondering how to go on
Author notes
Pic inspired:
http://cdcrew.deviantart.com/art/summer-lovin-32421188
A contest entry
- My First contest,, your challenge by Simsboy.
525 points, ended March 16, 2008, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pic Prompt 3 by Aussie Gypsy.
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very good
i liek this alot someitmes we all feel this way -
wow i so cant believe your 12... this was amazing!!!
great job i loved it!!
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Well this is full of such emotion.. you write beyond your years!
I love the repetition at the end of each stanza... really got across the thought that he was confused and questioning his own existance and how to move forward with his life.
Well done!
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This is an amazing poem with so much emotion and feeling! I saw the pic and you did a really good job with it. (Rondo likes it too
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*KT*
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it's pretty good, best of luck in the contest
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OMG this is absolutely wonderful and your friggin 12 this is an amazing poem you are great
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*sigh*
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i really like the repitition too, and the deepness of this write. its very sad.
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I like the repitition of the stanza because at the end you're really aware of how much more you know now, but then you're like: Dammit, I don't really know anything, do I!
Very nice write, thought provoking as well. Always a plus.
3 CLAPPIES FOR JOHN ADAMS!
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