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A dance upon the black tar moon

 

 

 

Quietly she slips from grace to dance upon the black tar moon.

Where air is light not fragranced with heaviness of life.

A feather's weight she casts her fate in consequences unknown.

A universe of fragrant breath fills her hungered lungs.

 

Bold and tender choices whisper fragile steps of hope.

Reality will arise too quickly with the dawn's new light.

May she dance boldly with new courage to be found,

upon the mourning of sunshines tender smile.

 

 An inspiring soul, renewed beauty to behold.

Rewarding us with the gift of enduring faith.

A slip from grace, moonlit trace,

she dances tenderly with feather's fate,

for her soulful life.

 

 

 

 

 

 picture is talented artistry of silent-reverie.@deviantart.com

 a beautiful gallery of artistic images available to view. 

 

 

 

 

 dedicated to my lovely daughter, Angela Faith.

 

 

 

 

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  • sheltered
    October 16, 2008
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    very picturesque and smoothly written


  • TyrannyForestFairy
    July 24, 2008

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    This was magnificant in every aspect. The vocabulary is so descriptive and provokes beautiful imagery that can be so powerful. The concept of hope in this piece is a major positive, its very inspirational. Just beautiful, I loved this, EXCELLENT!!

    ~Emily~ xx

  • celadia
    May 30, 2008

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    That first stanza is a doozy, just so good, so wonderful and the rest of the poem is just fantastic. I would love to be able to write 'space' poems. This is superior quality in my opinion.


  • hand-in-hand
    April 23, 2008

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    The poem plays out like a verbal dance, I really enjoyed reading it and thank you for suggesting I do so. I have seen family members fall into this trap, and unlike you I developed hate and anger as coping strategies. I think that not only your daughter should be recognised for her courage but you also.


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    April 12, 2008
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    Thankyou so tenderly!

    This poem really helped me soothe my soulful tears with all of heaven's might to help me understand the pain of my beautiful daughters journey of courage and hope.
    I am just so honored to receive the gold on this
    very intimate poem.
    ears



  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    March 30, 2008

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    Stunning

    This piece of writing is stunningly-beautiful. You carry the reader away with your words Kathleen. The imagery is very very beautiful too. I got lost in this piece. It was as if she was dancing her cares away.

    Love
    Wayne Leon
    xx


  • liduen silver member
    March 25, 2008

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    Beautiful, absoulutly beautiful...wonderful imagery and description of the feeling you get from dancing. Great job and good luck in the contest


  • creationsfromheart
    March 17, 2008
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    this is a beautiful write and such a wonderful dedication but the contest is for 50-55 words.


  • grannyeri gold member
    March 16, 2008

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    What a wondrous picture that inspired this awesome poem. Great flow and lovely words to bring this write to such fluid motion.


  • Chocolate Chip
    March 16, 2008

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    absolutley stunning indeed. i agree with timespell, the picture really does go hand in hand with your words. wonderful, absolutley wonderful!!


  • grace elizabeth
    March 16, 2008

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    i love this poem. the picture is amazing.
    i hope you win the contest. its a great poem i love the emotion and feeling of it.


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    March 16, 2008
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    Nice job depicting the exhuberance and grace of the dancer. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Timespell
    March 16, 2008

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    WOW... That dripped with elegance, wish I could write something this good. And the picture went hand in hand with your words. "Stunning to say the least.

    Good luck in the contest.

    All the best,

    ~T.S~


  • Grateful
    March 15, 2008

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    Excellent poem with great imagery and wonderful words. I am glad I read it...good of luck in the contest...thank you


  • LadyDementia gold member
    March 15, 2008

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    Beautifully done, love the word play you've used. A very inspiring piece. All the best with it in the contest


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    March 13, 2008

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    super lovely! always loving your words and verses, best of luck hun


    Tasha


  • Flight of Dragons
    March 13, 2008
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    Whoa awsome. This is by far on to put in your personal hall of fame. Great write!

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