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The Root of Nana's Tea

 

 

 

 

Her dimpled pot
finds weight

in the mint bush
floating, beneath rust
at the fence.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

A contest entry

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  • truembrace
    December 4, 2008

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    I can't imagine for this particular prompt that you could have possibly put more imagery with such succinct and perfect lines. There's so much to like about this, but there is most certainly something I like most -- the realness of an image of a nana creating something so unique to herself that you've given to everyone through poetry.

    Definitely deserved gold with this one...

    Kim


  • cvillelisa
    March 22, 2008

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    Quite good indeed. Congratulations on the gold.

    Lisa


  • Jaden silver member
    March 21, 2008
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    I think this is a well-deserved gold. I think I like it better than the Red Wheelbarrow poem.


  • Emerald13
    March 19, 2008

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    congratulations Stacey ... so very very nicely done ! ... i love the 'finds weight' ... it carries the whole and keeps it firmly entrenched (so to speak) ... it is no mean feat to establish that 'weight' in 16 words ... congrats on the gold! (Lovely piece) >>> Gina


  • misselaineous
    March 18, 2008
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  • zillion
    March 18, 2008

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    This is so nostalgic. It's weird to remember something that never happened to you, which is exactly what happened when I read this. Nice.


  • Saffron gold member
    March 18, 2008

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    Congratulations! What amazing images from just a few words--this is just perfect.

    Saffron


  • Floorboards
    March 18, 2008
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    Congrats!


  • tara wilson gold member
    March 17, 2008

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    congrats on the gold, Stacy..


  • just rob gold member
    March 17, 2008

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    Well done

    I grow mint in my garden. I will take this there with me. It will make me warm.

    Well deserved. Bravo


  • Levon
    March 17, 2008
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    Lovely, best of the entire lot for sure!


  • BellaD
    March 17, 2008
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    Love it!

    A beautiful poem. Very reminiscent of the William Carlos Williams' poem! Congrats on the Gold.

  • Rowan gold member
    March 17, 2008
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    I love how all the senses are awakened in this piece with so few words. Congratulations!!


  • tara wilson gold member
    March 16, 2008
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    these individual items really make a nice picture in my mind...lovely & sensual with the smell of mint and use of color in this - excellent poem..


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    March 15, 2008

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    Due to the large number of entries, I won't be commenting on each piece but will certainly be reading and rereading them all. I wanted to thank you for your entry here, I hope to have the contest judged fairly soon...


    superb...


    al


  • NurseChilly gold member
    March 14, 2008

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    can almost rub the mint between my fingers with this one stacy... well done and good luck in this one too



    G.x

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