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Ripened Poison, Crimson Petals

Drink the ripened poison
Let the warmth overwhelm
Trapped inside the darkness
Boiling blood within the realm

Harsh words stuck in your head
Curse the world you are forced into
Rose petals fall with time
They thrive to survive, like you

Each day you cower
Give up; breathe in the acid
Confusing your unconcious
No longer pure and placid

Powerful thoughts taunt your desires
In unknown ways unitl guilt
The mind is an intruiging place
The smallest things make it wilt

Fingernails slice the glass
Sketching your life's story
Echoing screams grasp your throat
Lingering shadows begin to worry

Blood-stained arms clear away
Frozen tears upon the rosened cheek
Dark shadows seek unfamilliar dreams
As your voice becomes weak

The pain all too real
Listen, knave, are you deaf?
The devil's angels are calling
Will you surrender by death? 

Take hold of your own body
Search for new rays of light
You're never too fragile
Run away without fear or fright

Ally with the innocent half
Trust it, and you'll trust yourself
Never doubt what paths lie ahead
Everything hides behind reason on a shelf

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  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    October 18, 2008

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    Very good dark write. I like that last stanza, ends it well. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.

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    whisper


  • Emotional-wreck
    May 23, 2008
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    Drink the ripened poison
    Let the warmth overwhelm
    Trapped inside the darkness
    Boiling blood within the realm

    Harsh words stuck in your head
    Curse the world you are forced into
    Rose petals fall with time
    They thrive to survive, like you

    i loved those lines.Great job it was really really a pleasure of MINES to read this.I loves it.Good luck!


  • RunningFromReality
    April 2, 2008
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    oneechan again: love the poem. lol, knave.... that rox. for the triple rhyme i pointed out: you can put minds, dreams, slumber. personally i would like it with dreams. okay anyways. peace out! love ya.


  • TabbyCat
    March 24, 2008
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    The metaphor you have constructed here is beautiful, intricate, and interesting. I wish I understood the meaning behind this piece more fully...but even without full understanding, it was a striking write. From the haunting title, to the last line, I enjoyed it.