to run, nowhere to hide
someone help me please.
Evil everywhere nowhere
to run, nowhere to hide
someone help me please.
to run, nowhere to hide
someone help me please.
In a list
A contest entry
- 15/13/15 Quickie by Nighttime angel.
470 points, ended March 13, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - HM winners or Metaphorical poems by Chocoholic156.
550 points, ended September 21, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This was very short, and you repeated a lot of words, it seemed like, in that tiny time. You spaced it very well, creating new lines and keeping up the flow. But I am not fond of the Crying face at the end. It conveyed your words and feelings, but I don't think it has a place in this poem. If I was doing a short poem contest you would have done well, but there are other people who did so much better with more work and words.
You are a fantastic writer, it just wasn't what I was looking for now.
Good luck, and keep writing! -
You must be talking about me. LOL
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I like your take on the prompt. I could see this happening and hear these thoughts running through your head. excellent poem
good luck
kat -
A lot said in one line!!
Best of Luck in the contest!!
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hahahahaha. this is great especially the crying part
nice write, very amusing, good luck in the contest!
take care
stephanie =)
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