I watched as
he scurried away
and returned
seconds later
claiming he’d
forgotten where
he was going.
He went looking
for his memory
before he even
knew he lost it.
Each moment
he once held onto
dearly was stolen
by the greedy
grips of age.
Mind emptied-
a vast abyss
that had carried
thoughts full
of happiness
and hope.
Grains of
remembrance
were washed
away by the
currents of time.
He suddenly
stood up again
preparing for
another trip down
Forgetfulness Lane.
I sat clinging
tightly to a clock
listening as the
seconds ticked away
praying life
had different
plans for me.
Author notes
Option #14: Alzheimer's.
In a list
A contest entry
- Let's Get the Ink Flowing!!! by Auburn Sunrise.
1800 points, ended March 16, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Living With Alzheimers Or Dementia by CountryCousin.
1500 points, ended March 27, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
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So true.
Again we have a perfect description of Alzheimers and you know my uncle once said when he got lost that he was not lost. He said that he knew where he was all along. But he didn't. Thank you for entering the contest. -
Well done!
A great read. I had to chuckle at the trip down forgetfulness lane even though Alzheimer's isn't funny. A number of my husbands aunts suffered terribly from it. Good nutrition can help and I have just learned that meditation (over time) can thicken the part of the brain that thins out due to Alzheimer's. Just food for thought. -
You have my sympathies. Alzheimers is quickly overcoming my dad, as you can see from my entry in this contest. Very well done!
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Nice. The first poem I've read on this subject, and it was done well. I particularly enjoyed the last stanza. Should "grips" be "grip" in the third stanza?
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wonderfully done... a friend of mine's grandfather went through this and i remember her telling me how sad it was to watch someone who was once so vibrant go through something like this. you laid this out in a soft, gentle way yet gave that feeling losing something precious. well done... and good luck in the contest.
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i liked this poem. it has a sense of world weary-ness. it also shows that no matter how much we wait for something, it always seems to evade us. i liked your examplory speech, and how i could see your images. Keep writing...you're doing very well...
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ohhh I forgot to mention...
When I was younger (about 16-17) and on Paxil, I had severe memory loss. This really hit close to home, because of that experience. Even though I realize the situations are drastically different, it reminded me so much of that feeling of just being empty in your head, of just not knowing.... it's terrifying! -
Frighteningly good!
Seriously... how do you know what having Alzheimer's is like? It was like you were inside the man's head... brilliant.
Either you're an empath or you have done a lot of research. You're not a psych major are you? LOL.
Definitely a very engaging, well-written piece.
As always, your talent shines through with a stunning display of vibrant words.
Thanks for the awesome entry!
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Ugh. This really strikes me because I'm really scared of this. I can't believe what'd be like to feel like that... so lost... I know I'd feel worthless myself, though, I wasn't.
Striking piece... really a bite in the behind from reality and it really gets to us. Good luck in the contest.
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