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The Life of a Kitchen Floor

An egg, vanilla, a flour dusting,
water, cloth, and suds.
I taste the sweetness left behind,
from cookies and milk duds.

I get walked on but that's okay,
my place in life is here.
I witness every single day,
I cradle every tear.

A pitter-patter, smudge of mud,
they're not so far away.
They roll the ball and stretch to yawn,
I'm here to sleep or play.

My visitors, they never cease
a wagging tail ahead,
a soggy bone a booming thud,

and I've become his bed.

 

The countless days throughout the years,

your loved ones I'll hold near.

Beneath your feet I'll steady you,

the memories I'll save here.

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  • crivanea silver member
    August 5, 2008
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    lol..def. imaginative..although i love the content of this poem..i believe u focus too much on thought and lack the careful attention to fully polish this poem..the rhyme scheme could be better and the flow is a bit awkward in some areas..but still nice job and good luck in the contest


  • lightswitches
    July 31, 2008
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    this was really cute!
    Thanks for entering my contest!


  • Smores Girl89
    May 12, 2008

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    wow. totally awesome. i never would have thought of writing about the floor, i can tell you that lol. my thoughts have strayed onto only one subject of late.. *sigh* quite lovely indeed. my kitchen floor is always a welcome surface to sit or flop upon to just imagine the things that have happened in there over the years... i must content myself with knowing only the part i have played. friggen curiosity. i might as well be a cat *raises one eyebrow with a sly smile*

    ~m~


  • Melodies
    March 14, 2008

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    An adorable floor here! I'd like to give you a present... maybe drop some chocolate on this sweet floor. Wonderfully written with smiles throughout.


  • Kelli Marie
    March 13, 2008

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    You did a great job with this. I like that you allowed the floor to have a taste of the "sweet" life. Very nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
    Kelli


    • rosie4491
      March 13, 2008
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      Hey. Thanks so much for your support! Often i have a really hard time with writing prompts... but i wanted to start doing these contests so i can improve my poetry skills. i tend to write only about one subject. thanks

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