For a week she had been there
On the other side of the bar
He was captivated by her beauty
She was the prettiest girl by far
Every night he waited his chance
For other men to get out of the way
But tonight he would talk to her
He couldn’t wait another day
He asked if he could drive her home
She smiled and said “Yes please”
Those amber eyes had captured him
He hoped she was no tease
Her heavy perfume made him hot
They drove for miles in the dark
Then she suggested they pull over
He found a place to park
The small light inside the car
Showed up her coal black hair
She let it loose, cascading down
He could only stare
She slowly slipped off her blouse
She never made a single sound
The sight of her creamy skin
Made his heartbeat pound
He had to kiss those blood red lips
Wrap her up in his embrace
It was then he looked into her eyes
In that perfect porcelain face
Those eyes flashed burning amber flames
The blood was singing in his veins
She placed a kiss upon his neck
With pure pleasure in the pains
Their bodies soon became as one
Made love like he had never known
Pure ecstasy, such intensity
To untold heights they’d flown
He was so pale, weak and drained
She had gone, just took off in flight
His blood still ran down his chest
Now he was a creature of the night
Author notes
Option 2
A contest entry
- OPTIONS AND THE BLESSED DARK ANGEL by Devilish Temptation.
600 points, ended March 19, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dark Passions by DrkPoet.
450 points, ended April 8, 2008, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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great pome i love it. but its not the vampire test im looking for. keep up the great work thoue
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I LOVED IT
Awsome job truely wonderful and a great story.
Thanks for the welcome. and keep up the amazing work pen on poet.
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I liked the story that you weaved here, it was steamy and well done in imagination the rhyming flowed together well and all in all was a good piece. Two suggestions for spelling though,
1. "She let it lose, cascading down" should be loose
2. "She had gone, just took of in flight" should be off
other than that you've done a great job thanks for entering
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Phew! Where is all this coming from? Very very hot write I had to shift in my seat a bit!!!!
Best of luck babes-scuse me gotta get some ice!!!
xxx Hilly
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"She slowly stripped off her blouse
She never made a single sound"
...her mysterious advance makes the event so very interesting and adds to the pleasure of the erotica...
"Those eyes flashed burning amber flames
The blood was singing in his veins"
...these are the magical lines...
so powerful...
It was a lustfully pleasureable encounter...I enjoyed the progress of the event....
made me horny...
Kisses, my dear!
Galaxy2
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OMG
WOW WOW WOW OMG ! I'm speechless very very brillently written I love it, it's so raw with emotion and tempingly delicious, like the picture too goes well with this piece. You are a talented writer thank you for entering
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